All Comments on 'Unrepentant Heart'

Great story every time I read it.

Still enjoying this story......five stars!

Daaaaamn. It looks like husband is going to jail after he kills the predator.

Macabre, but good; very good ending.

like her excuses and his truthful reason for her cheating.

Still didn't finish it

Wow! Creepy! Love it!

"We broke it off over six months ago". OK, maybe I'm being nit picky here but the night Dan caught them in bed together was six months ago, so how is it possible that they broke up before he caught them? Also, Sheryl and the kiddie fiddler declared their love for each other and discussed marriage yet split up as soon as their affair was uncovered? That doesn't seem plausible to me.

We'll done. Good impression of a fractured mind

The finacial, giveaway was over the top. Stupid.

For me the husband from part 1 is like another person and husband from part 2 is another. Atleast he didn't end up as a wimp.

Wow!

Ed

Outstanding!!! Very possible outcome of seeing that shit if didn't kill or maim both immediately.

Not a psychiatrist or psychologist but know a bunch including 4 classmates who are .

3 stars - I can see the BTB crowd will love this story. Not my thing.

Very good. An outstanding ending. We know how he took care of his slut wife and that is enough. A man destroyed by a salacious woman.

And here we have yet again a total house giveaway. One of lit authors favorite gimmicks. NOBODY gives away a house, but yet here we have an extremely common but totally stupid literary device. It is almost like the authors all copy each other's work and ideas. Oh, wow, give away the house, what a great idea!,,, stupid wife would have been prosecuted for child endangerment anyway, just trash .

Bogie says, goodbye sweetheart..

Ain't perfect, but definitely gives a satisfactory fleshing out to what was an incomplete story. Only part I have trouble with is (oddly enough) the title. I keep imagining him trying to sing the song but realising the only lyrics he knows are in the name.

Nope....a negative 5 stars on this as what the wife was heard aying to lover boy in no way matched up to what this story is saying.

I could see it as a movie script. The author may not be around, but new readers should go through this series.

As for Willoughby below, there are few things as amusing as anonymous readers with "handles" criticizing readers who decline to have a "handle" because they don't want to be databased. Anyone with a vpn could have 50 handles if he wanted. The fact is that we are all anonymous, unless someone is stupid enough to use his name as his handle. I guess it's possibly that there's someone out there named "Dogfart 69". All I can say is that his parents made an odd choice. As for the rest, readers with "handles" remind me of Dr. Seuss' "Sneeches with stars".

Let's see, they guy keeps saying, "Unbreak my heart," and gets agitated at the sight of his wife, and the doctor doesn't think it might be marital issues? Now, after three days, he finally talks to the cops and finds out what happened, it isn't obvious?

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I hope in six months the cops have advised the wife of Lover Boy's background, and she's kicked him out?

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"She needed love and passion. She had met a man. He paid attention to her, flattered her." - Did she ever say anything to him?

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"It was her husband's fault?" - Great way to win him back!

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"I don't believe" he was ever alone with the kids? But I thought she always sent them away?

Every time that I read this, I appreciate it more. I can’t think of any story in LW that paints a better picture of the fallout from marital infidelity. This is a different, but effective way of caring for the children.

Anon, I appreciate your comment, but my anonymous stalker follows me everywhere. He is nothing more than an , as you stated, an obnoxious, developmentally challenged, child without the ability to communicate with the grownups.

I typically do not comment on 15 yo stories because...well, it's not relevant. However, we have an Anony comment from this year - I'll comment on that even though I usually ignore idiotic input from chickenshit AHs that don't provide any contact info.

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Anony 5/30/20, what rock did you crawl out from under in order to throw shit at an identified (26thNC) commenter? Your ad hominem attack is the equivalent of a 6 yo shouting insults across the street to a 4 yo where you both are forbidden by your mommies from crossing the street.

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A further note to the exalted cabal of watchguards of the precious rules safeguarding the integrity of Literotica:

How did you miss removing such trash? I point out the 5/30/20 comment AND this one. (OMG, please don't banish me from the kingdom... A fate worse than death!)

good to see closet cuck 26thNC comment again

Original!!!!

Thanks to the author for a different, if extreme, take on the hurt caused by infidelity.

Consequences are a little extreme in this case, but then, so were the wife's actions in the lead up to this story.

Never did hear the wife's side of this really. We did hear the author's take on cheating though...

So sad

Thank you for giving this story some closure. I wish he would have killed them both!!!

Appreciate this chapter more this time. He's still breathing , but his soul is dead. She should be a very good mother, knowing what is coming if she's not.

I give it five stars. I hated it, especially part one but it was very well written. To depressing for words but well written.

morbid, fiction, sorry, with end. LOVE slap hapy papy #9

He was broken by what he saw, and heard. Now, he lives in a cold dark place, that it seems not even his own children can reach, it sucks to exist in a world like that. Darkly written.

but he had no more love left. what little love he had was ONLY for his children.

he threatened his wife, he would do it too. he has nothing now to lose. he's more dangerous than anyone you'll prolly ever see in your pampered life.

he'll prolly kill her lover, just because. he's beyond 'winning and losing'. he'll kill or be killed. it's primal, it's beyond what you can fathom. go up to the 'ice man' and call him a wimp, i bet you wont.... which shows me who is and who isn't a wimp.

he lacks the ability to be scared of literally anything. he'll bounce back. the world needs men like him....to protect people like you....

It's no more complicated than that. Betrayal can do that to a man. Intense story and good.

It could have been longer. But maybe not. Everything needed has been said. He was forever changed, like good men who have the horrors of war visited upon them. Or survivors of family massacres. There is not enough condemnation possible for his evil wife. People don't want to admit his soul had been torn, there is no getting over or past such an event, and he chose not to kill his children's mother.

made by an abnormal.......TK U MLJ LV NV

Not the ending that I hoped for. I wanted her to.leave and him to stay with the kids. I do know where I hope he I going.

The guy wimped out and allowed that whore to raise his kids??? he was worse than the skank!!!

This was supposed to be a sequel, but it was more like a parallel story to the second part.

So why would he leave them with a lying cheating slut? Why let your kids be influenced by her as they grow, especially knowing that at least one of the kids saw her cheat.

He did get one thing right. Cheating is a choice and all other excuses are just BS.

As I said great story. The only thing I can think of though is the children and how this will hurt them.

Didn't remember reading it before until I saw my own comment!

I was going to repeat something that Dan said, that these women who complain about how much time their husbands spend at work are always quite happy to take the material goods their husbands' hard work provides.

As I said in my earlier comment, did she ever TALK to him about how "stale" their marriage was, or do anything about it?

I would love for you to write a sequel to this, maybe set it 5 or 10 years into the future. I can really relate to Dan and his state of mind. Also, I wonder how his children fair, and the choice he offered. To hell with the rules, 10 stars.

is there a 3rd part to this?

nothing more I need to say

awesome big 5

Awesome story. some wordings need proofreading.👍🏼

Is that most writers look for some truth even in their wildest fiction. This wasnt fun. Too much truth.

Perfect description of a burn out. Once a man stops caring about living or dying, life is very simple. Unfortunately, he still had the kids to care about. He had not lost all his love. He would not be able to leave them for long. When he came back to them, she'd be in the way. Knowing how she abused them with her cheating would be all the justification he needed to do what he had to do.

This passage say's it all about cheaters:

"No, Sheryl, you did this for one reason; because you wanted to and could get away with it, pure and simple. Everything else, Strickland's professed love, his cock, the sex, my work, your desire for a life away from the pressure of being a parent were all just attempts at justification."

Should have left this one out. 1*

On the weird scale of 1 to 10 this is a 16 I can't think of anything else! So l love you all! GREG. OH 50 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE.

Too fucking weird for me.

choices and consequences////////// now its Stricklands turn to make a choice, TK U MLJ LV NV

and he will deal with the other guilty party

Turgid, hackneyed, and absolutely devoid of character development. The wife acts like a soulless Stepford denizen. Just plain moronic.

Good effort and I gave you a 4

Overwrought melodramatic mush.

And is STILL suffering!

“She admitted he had been an excellent father but she needed more. She needed love and passion” – As usual in these stories, dis she ever talk to HIM about that? Of course not!

“Our marriage was going stale? The passion was being replaced with complacency?” – And as I’ve said before, what was SHE doing to enliven their marriage?

Way too weird to grade.

Still love it.

I would kill 4 my wife or take a built 4 her but I could not take her cheating

Thank God I am in a life long totally trustworthy relationship where cheating is totally impossible for either of us as we have loved each other all our lives.I married my sister and despite a life full of other people's disgust we have never even looked at other people.Every time I leave home I know we ache for when we will be together again.Thank God as if what happened to him happened to me I would have been destroyed as well in the same way.I would definately kill myself.

Fantastic bit of writing but a bit of a shock to the system. I could see a bit of me in there.

dont know if I commented on this before, but fantastic bit of writing, both chapters.

Thx and would really love to see you crank it up again-but remember, you gotta finish the damn stories, unlike that Michael & Elizabeth crap you foisted on us.

It's clear you are a good writer, love to see more.

To Un Break My Heart!

Well done and thank you for the story!

Pleaae keep writing.

Goddamit, that was excellent. Absolutely Excellent.

His characters and fascinating and the dialogue hits hard. I feel for him and understand him. The basic principle is that he can no longer give emotionally to his kids. He is fairly sure that the wife can and so as long is she is a good mother to the kids he will not make her pay for being a bad wife. The best possible position in the midst of darkness.

What did the worthless cunt expect? She changed her man. Fucking slut. Screwed a pedophile in front of her children. Tremendous drama. One more chapter.

damn this was a good story but it couldve been really good. The plot-- wife unsuspectfully begins an affair with a child molester, bringing him in to the house and saying she loves him... there should have been a chapter that dealt with the wifes emotions after finding out just what she had been doing.

5 amazing stars! My heart was pounding when I was reading the story. I wanted more.

well done. Five stars.

Why do women always cheat at their homes. I caught my Ex just the same way. Most are just sluts for any cock they can find. It's funny more women cheat then men now yet they get the house the kids and half of everything. That is why divorce is so profitable for these sluts. It is harder to get married than divorced. I would have killed the bitch knowing what she did with the kids in the house.

Next step, Strickland. What will he choose?

what ever could happen probably will or has. TK U MLJ LV NV

so would i

The story is riviting so far. Being a romantic I would like to see the 'wife' having to live with shell she created. Wife has no means of support; the kids are lossing their college funds with a very bleak future in sight.

I liked the thouht provoking vinyettes that are left hanging

Wonderfully written, inspite of the absence of sex(the story being on an erotic literature site). One would want to see them together again at least for the kids but this is harsh reality, the kind of steps a man would have to take.

the man should go on to be a super criminal that no one can stop like michal mires but more smarter like the joker, but the wife will know that every thing he does is because of her

You're an excellent writer, but I enjoyed the first story much more. I didn't care for the message in the sequel: that a woman who cheats is bringing evil into her house and, but for the kids, deserves to be killed. I doubt anyone would write a story like this about a man screwing around with his secretary. Oh, and the guy never seeing his kids again is way over the top. No father who loved his kids would just walk away from them because he was angry at their mother.

Terrific story, but he should have gotten the kids.

I have to say I'm really enjoying this series. Sex be damned, character interaction is where it's at. I have a good guess of what he's going to do but I wonder exactly whats going to happen.

I'm very curious about what happened to the child molestor....

Was he offered a choice? To be rope hung from a tree by his neck or his nuts, I hope!

As some other reviewer said, the wife's infidelity is nothing compared to the guy's psychosis. Okay, so the other man's, the pedophile, oughta be locked up for good; but that --- or the wife screwing with him --- had NOTHING whatsoever to do with the husband's unstable mental make up.

Some other reviewer also said it: a more "normal" husband, a loving man (towards the children, not the wife --- she deserved to be with the other man for sure; and her tears were only because she's caught; so they make a good team, having all the sex and eroticism she and that man wanted)

-- would have comforted his children, who had gone through so much, having to call him when their mother was fucking strange men like that pedophile whom she thought was just quite romantic.

A loving, true father would have done all he could to make sure his children are safe and away from such a dnagerous woman they have for a mother.

But the guy's attitude of: I wanted to kill you, but I will let you live, since I want you to take care of mine children. And take good care of them, you hear? 'Cuz if I heard you mistreat them, in any way, you will die immediately from my hand.

I mean, THAT is at least as psychothic as the pedophile, in a slightly different arena.

Those poor kids: an uncaring, selfish, destructive mother and a mentally psychotic father. He, obviously, blamed HER for his mental unstability. BS!

No "doctors" can cure this; only the AUTHOR of these characters!

You obviously know how to write. Still, this story isn't very erotic. Smart decision moving the 3rd chapter to non-erotic, this story is miscategorized.

I don't believe it.

Why did his wife say those comments about not wanting him to find out this way? Not like this? Why should he let her have the kids? She should be the one on the street!!!! I guess those PHD's couldn't reform common sense! What the hell was all the banter about between the doctor's? That just muddied it up. But this chapter was dark! I think I would have liked it better if he came back and tormented her to the point where she was repentant then his healing started, and hers! and over time fell back in love but after a lot of healing took pace on both sides of the table.

and brought him back to be a human being again. the writing was good and had me interested till the end. Maybe after he finds and kills this pedophile bastard he can come back after snapping out of the dark hole he climbed into and come back to his kids as a human being. Love hurts and this is the worst betrayl one can face. Well I see how the third part turns out!

Thanks for writing!

Sexmate

must be a true loving wife to put up with a mentally unstable, potentially violent man who abandoned his kids.

I still at times have that 1000 yard stare. I've lived with it for 35 years it seemed to come on less and less till a similar chapter of my life. It is back now with a vengeance. If you've never had it you wouldn't understand it. If you have you don't need to ask about it. You give a very realistic view of the mind behind the eyes. With the help of someone here at lit my eyes are coming back to normal. Thank you for writing this story.

Once more you wrote a truly compelling story. It made me think, what is the best solution here? Does he leave the children with a mother who took their safety so lightly? Is he really capable of taking them himself? In his state of mind, I say no. Does he press for the state to take them away? Unsatisfactory too. This is what a good story does, it makes the reader think. Bravo!

You're right. I don't like her at all.

unreal,unlikely and completely unerotic.

There is going to be another part. Can't wait for it!!

This was an awesome chapter. This is a man who told it like it was, he didn't come out forgiving, becoming a castrated cum drinking wimp. He came with death in heart for what his wife had done. So many other chapter would have the husband standing there watching jerking of, when the stranger turns around, the husband would wimp out and speak of his love for his wife. She would turn around and sp-eak of his small dick and she was being fucked by a real man. Look like she has been fucking for over a few weeks. I think his last statement as the chapter ends, it looks as though he is going to look for that child molester himself and confront him. I also think he will try to find out if he had touch any of his children. Am I right about this author?

I'm waiting for the explanation of something pointed out by another commenter. She said, "This isn't the way I wanted it to happen. You weren't supposed to find out this way!" That's not a random statement. It indicates a specific plan. Maybe it was a mistake to include it in the 1st part. But it needs explaining, especially when combined with how desperately she was searching for him in the beginning (after he left). That's inconsistent with her just planning to dump him.

No, it isn't clear that with his state of mind he could win the children in a custody battle. It depends on the state, the judge and the day the judge is having.

It just gets better and better! Waiting for the conclusion.

It is refreshing to read a fine story like this once in awhile. Please send us some more just as good.

Not that I like reading about a man whose soul is so severely crippled, but, well, I've had those eyes too. Two tours in Vietnam gave them to me. When a guy's seen just too much action, seen so much meaningless death, and witnessed just how inhumane humans can be, that his very soul just hangs up a "gone fishing" sigh and shuts a door inside his mind until it's safe to come out again.

Got my release and came home without any decompression time, and when the police officer I'd known from my childhood took his first look at my face, my eyes, his reaction was to step back and reach for his pistol. Looking back now, I can see that he was right to react as he did. I'd been through so much that I could easily kill without feeling anything other than imagining how I could have done so more efficently, more horrifically.

Honestly I see a lot of myself in Dan Turner...and I really, really regret knowing how he feels, and will feel for ages to come.

Dan offers the child molester the choice of taking his own life or being killed by Dan.

One of the posts below seemed to think Dan was offering himself a choice.

I think the molester having to make some choice similar to the above is likely nearer the point.

Very different and refresshing.Kept me riveted in suspense. Would like an update wth the confrontation with Stricland. Keep up the muse.

The agony was there in Unbreak My Heart, but no end was in sight. You have shown how the agony is constant and endless, but give the reader a better idea of how things had come about and who the characters really were. The two together are masterful.

As you know I am a Romantic, but not all outcomes are "happy ever after." After the things this man heard his wife say and agree to there could be no other ending, but there were no hints of that direction this was going to take in the first "part" of this story. Thank you for giving us a conclusion.

Doug

What a story, not the every day type the graces the pages here. This didn't need sex or anything to get its point across. Very well written very well done