All Comments on 'Vampire Alley'

Do another chapter hope someone comes along and saves her

I've read this story before. Is this a rewrite?

Yes, this is a rewrite... for some reason it was listed in Non-human instead of Non-consent this time, and I very specifically chose Non-consent - I think.

Also, there is a part two... coming soon.

I think this fits horror more than non human but add more. Its just a tease

I couldn't get into this at all. The first few paragraphs were redundant. Ok yeah I get it she's in shape she likes to work out but I don't want to have to keep reading that over and over that back story about it should have been trimmed. The writing is juvenile alot of telling going on than showing. I didn't feel an ounce of emotion for the main character.

The whole big dick is such a cliche in erotica. The vampire in this story acted more of a rapist rather than a vampire. I wasn't really entertained by this.

Couldn't really get into it, but I will try another chapter when posted.

A bit of reality. No woman would have a Sports bra many sizes too small. Especially with DDD's.

In fact, she would most likely wear a regular bra AND and Sports bra.

She's not new to exercise, so she would have proper clothing.

very good beginning can't wait for ch. 2