by La_Reina
I love this story already please continue writing this story...i want to know what's going to happen next in the demon world and will she figure out her powers
It was a good start but you have to re-read your stories before posting. In the middle you swithced from 3rd person narration to 1st person.
Its great beginning of a story... And yes i do actually love it a lot lol...You didn't rush it and you wrote it smoothly. Well...and you combined two of my favorite genre...non human and bdsm lol haha So I REALLY love it lol.
Great job, and I can't wait for the next chapter :)
Please I am begging you hurry out with more!!! I just happen on finding it and within the first paragraph I was into it!!! SO PLEASE I am kind of going stir crazy without something to read!!
I love it but this story is also on LustyLibrary Maybe you are the same author?.....idk
No I am not on Lusty Library. Did you just say that my story is on another website? Is it similar or is it my same story, because if it is. I'm gonna get it pulled. I didn't give anyone permission to use my story except on here and on Asextories.com.
I had just looked through all of Lusty Library. Are you sure, because I'm not finding the same story. Could you please recheck and maybe find the author's name or the title that they used for the same story. Thank you
you switched povs midstream which was a bit confusing.
So far this was a good start, and i would really like for you to continue. I am curious as to see what will happen to the human girl and Vashka...
So please continue.
Yes, I did switch P.O.V.s I thought I had put up asterisks (*) to separate the two, but I see I did not. I apologize for that. Also I do have an issue from switching b/w 1st and 3rd person in my stories. I will work on that. I'm glad you all love it and will start writing a new chapter soon.
Also I have submitted another story that I have been working on for some time called Running Away. I hope you all love it as I have writing it.
-La_Reina
AkA Rayne
I would love to see more of this story it has a great start and I'd love it if you'd continue.
pretty pretty please,
-Katie
I absolutely love your story. I'm head over heels waiting for more.
i really think you should continue on with your story, it really great, plz write some more to the story
i love it, please finish it! this was hot as hell [pun probably not intended, lol]. i think you can make this idea into a properly rounded story, and i look forward to your future works.
by the way, i found some of your stroy on another site, and just wondered if you put it there of if it has been stolen.
w w w .asexstor ies.c_o_m/Vashka-Demon-Protector-II/ind ex.ht ml
[i have put spaces and underscores in there, just so you know...]
hope noone has stolen your stuff, coz it is a horrible feeling having your work taken by another.
i was in the process of writing a book of poetry, and when i went to get it published, i found that one of my proof readers had already taken it as her own.
I loved your story. Could you please continue it? I'm so excited to hear what happens next!
you seem to switch from third person to first person in this story. the girl would not know any of the demons thoughts unless your writing in the third person. but if you are then you can't say "I thought he was doing this" or something similar, you would say " trisha thought he was doing this" or w/e her name was.
anyways aside from that, it was pretty hot and I would like to know the rest of the story.
I agree. I need to edit the story. I had this story on another site in 2 parts. I combined the parts and where the story changes from 3rd to 1st is where the 2 stories become 1.
I hope you also plan on adding more! I can't wait for the next installment.
It's a very interesting story! I would like to keep reading. Please keep writing. I'm sure it'll become a great series!
please finish the story I really want to read more! Out of all the stories i read on literotica this has to be one of the best.
Great story please do write the part three...I can't waittt!
Oh god .. You have captivatied me with thus lovely story! I really love it! Please continue for I will be waiting! Absolutlu love it!