All Comments on 'Waiting'

You kept this story in hand with skill and precision. Beautifully managed - and again, marred only by the lack of editing, which creates distraction from all the positive aspects of your imaginative and well-constructed stories.

I loved this piece, and especially from the male partner's viewpoint. Keep writing, please!

When he puts the bag on the porch they agree NOT to do anything. What a joke. And the wine was previously uncorked. Who takes a chance that something is in the wine? No way he drinks any. And after she slaps him I think he quits playing. She brings her nipple close to his mouth and he ignores it. She tries to mount him - turn away. Poorly written, stupid story.

Or you need to do a better job proof reading. There's an "uncorked bottle of wine" in the bag. Which means the wine is flooding the bag and when he opens it, it's all over the floor. "Put the bag on the porch and we'll forget this whole thing" Next sentence - "If the bag is not on the porch I'll know you decided NOT to accept my instructions". So what happens if he doesn't put the bag on the porch? That was very funny shit. I think Chris realizes she's bat-shit-crazy and never sees or talks to her again. Laughably bad.

1 star

My deepest fantasy is to tie a man (any man) to a bed (preferably his bed) and blindfold him. He must be either in his boxer underwear or totally naked. I want him gagged. I am in total control. Our adventure must start out on a Friday evening...so I will have the entire weekend for me to enjoy our time together. All of our friends and family will have been told we are going on a hiking trip and don't wish to be disturbed unless an emergency comes up. What I do to this man is my secret. But you are certainly welcome to use your imagination. Do I torture him? Even, perhaps, kill him? Do I emasculate him? Do I castrate him? Do I have a group of his coworkers peg him in his anus? Or do we go the opposite direction and give him an entire weekend of the best sex he has never even dreamed of?

This was an intriguing idea, but told awkwardly as already pointed out by the nameless. The thump had limitless possibilities that were left unexplored. Maybe a bondage device? A trunk of toys? I'd be happy to proofread your sequel.