All Comments on 'Waking Up On Sunday'

the pacing, description, and eroticism all mesh to form a very hot story! Simply terrific!

to a hot ending! Very believable situation. Watch your verb tenses, etc... in at least one spot you shifted from 3rd person past tense to second person (you instead of she). Generally that type of error causes me to quit reading immediately, but fortunately the rest of the story held together pretty consistently. Overall a very good job!

I thought I had caught most of the changes of tense during this. I found I kept jumping from past to present tense a lot as I as writing.

As for the pronoun slip, that was simply a result of me writing this specifically for someone and getting wrapped up in it. It's all her fault I tell ya. >_>

I enjoyed your story very much !!!!

Wonderful build up, and a perfect finish!