All Comments on 'Walking Into The Unknown'
by LynneLynne23
- 12 Comments
Anonymousover 13 years agoNot bad for first try - suggest you take advantage of the site's editorial services. Also, using spell check would catch most of the spelling errors, such as "tounge" for tongue.
Anonymousover 13 years agoYou should definitly continue to write more stories like this one. You should write a second chapter to this story, I enjoyed it a great deal.
2275jrover 13 years agobrilliant first story. reading this was awsome. klike watching it taking place right before my eyes, so very exciting hot and very horny.
love lesbian stories more of this one would be brilliant.
Captain Midnightover 13 years agoI liked the way the story focused on Willow wanting people at school to notice her for the wrong reasons, and how someone noticed her for the right reasons. I was kind of put out by the drunken mother and the loutish stepfather, since you would have to have Willow get away from them somehow later on. But Andrea was so cool and neat and caring that it made the love scene very credible and hot, if you can forgive me that word. Hope to see you more on this site!
LynneLynne23over 13 years agoAuthorThank you SO much!! It really means a lot and I know, I moved a bit fast with everything and I'll have to use the help from an editor for my next story. I may begin a second chapter for this one, but I'm not too sure yet. Thanks for the feedback everyone!
AnomolousCowherdover 13 years agoA very nice story, even if it weren't a first try. Looking forward to more!
Anonymousabout 13 years agoI really enjoyed reading this story, it deserves another chapter. I hope you do not become like so many other authors on this site that leave a story hanging there & never finish it.
TallErosabout 13 years agoReally good story--kudos to you for submitting it. Your main character is personable, and likeable. I'd love to read a second chapter, and/or a backstory that explores Willow's past--she sounds like she has a really interesting and sexy past.
Anonymousover 9 years agoThis was so similar to my first girl/girl experience way back in the '60's when I was in high school. Thanks for a great story!
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