All Comments on 'Watching Him Back Ch. 02'

Oh.My.God. “I'm petrified that my mom will smell all the gay in the room before I can pull him back to the pool house.” Laughed my ass off! I laughed out loud in a couple of places in the story but that was my fave. Was hoping you would continue, I love the dialogue between these two. I just plain LOVE this story. And whew, you do write sex scenes so well! *sigh* now the wait for Chapter 3 begins…

love the dialogue, both internal and between the two. I voted five stars, which is a rarity for me, thanks for the fantastic late night read...I can't wait to see where this one goes....

The seduction was probably one of the sweetest I've read in awhile. I could feel their inexperience and need for each other. They are so hot together, and their need to keep this on the downlow seems heartbreaking, especially for Crispin.

there was more. I didn't think I was going to get as addicted to this story as I did.

I know I'm nitpicking, but the song lyrics are by Carole King from her 1971 album Tapestry, not a '60s tune. Other than that, I love this story. It has a purity to it, with Aaron not expecting to admire Crispin like he doesn and trying to be cool about it. Their secrecy is sad, Crispin seems to know it's going to end badly but likes Aaron so much he doesn't care. They're both trying to make believe it's only about the sex when it's so much more. Very nice.

Sorry to nitpick a nitpick but the author was right. The Shirelles released 'Will you love me tomorrow' back in 1960/1. King, who wrote the song, recorded a version for Tapestry but it wasn't the original release.

Loved the story by the way, I suspect there are loads of gay guys reading this who recognise a lot of it.

Great story. Hair pulling during sex is sexy as hell.

Hot story, romantic and sexy! I like how the character development is going. Not sure how far this is going but it would be nice to see inside Crispin's head if you take it that much further.

It's funny, you throw some emotion into the story and some realism at times. I did like the chapter. The only thing that bothered me about the sex was the whole, no prep work before penetration. I totally get the 1 finger, 2 finger, 3 finger GO! thing is way overdone but not stretching before anal sex would hurt like an SOB, especially for a virgin. Fact of life, anal sex hurts sometimes and if not done properly, all the time. However, that is a tiny detail and overall the story was really well done. Good job!

Sweet, intelligent, endearing characters, kick ass writing, great plot and an amazing sense for comedic timing! Love it, and can't wait for more!

I love the way you write.

Your style is sharp and to the point, without ever feeling rushed. And it's bloody clever. Humour carries weighty issues forward without trivialising them; and every nuance of the deepest emotions is sketched innovatively, without even the slightest melodrama. Your instinctive ability to tantalise and entertain while simultaneously spearing me through my very core has me hooked. It would appear that I've stumbled upon a veritable magician.

Hot damn.

AH

Really well done. You capture the emotions and how unsure you are the first time so well. You are developing them nicely. I just feel like Crispin is gonna get the low end of the bargain. I believe Aaron has his reasons to keep his being gay a secret but I think that by hiding the relationship, Crispin won't be able to help feeling cheap. We'll see. I find it hard to believe that his mom wouldn't suspect something when Crispin walks in looking like he did. I mean, lets be honest that his mom has to knwo this is not her son's type of friend.

I look forward to next

I agree with everything AzanianHeat says !!! I lover your writingstyle and can't wait for more.. You are definitely one of my favourite writers here on Literotica

Your just fucking awesome. Yep.

I have been watching and waiting for this chapter. I am completely in love with these characters. I can see them, hear them, feel them, it's awesome. You're an -amazingly- gifted writer. I want more, more, more!! of Crispin and Aaron.

I would love to read more about Aaron and Crispin what happens next ????? Plze write more , let them have some kind of happy ending....

I love them both!! Sometimes, first person narrators are totally forgotten and it's the character the narrator is seeing that is deep and rich and alive—not so with this story. Aaron is charming, flawed, hot, horny, deep, smart and different. Those two are just perfect together :) i absolutely love this story and it was so fucking hot!! You absolutely cannot stop there! You have to go on! I even like the fact that neither character is expecting it to last, that they both anticipate problems, that although they're not expecting much, they both still want it really badly. That's why it would be kinda nice if fate surprised them by having their relationship last, withstanding the secrecy of highschool, the long distance of college. God, I'd love to read a phone sex scene between them. "Ohhhfuck, Crispin…cum all over your phone for me!" and Crispin blushes bright red at the suggestion but does it anyway, having an intense, kinky orgasm… yeah, okay. Now I want to write the scene myself :P or do what I did with Frathouse Troopers and beg you to let me write Crispin's POV ;)

Only criticism is the amount of spelling, omission and grammatical errors, but really they aren't that bad. It's worse when someone is repetitive in sentence structure and vocab. However, this story, stylistically and narratively speaking, flowed from start to finish :)

glad to see that familiar writing style here again..you are awesome!

Next chapter...now...I mean now...

I keep re-reading these two chapters over and over. I love these guys! Please please please write more for them! <3

i find Aaron's inner monologue absolutely fucking hilarious, and i love Crispin's taunts at the end. that last mental image so make this my favourite chapter and i cannot wait for number 4

You are a wonderful writer

Glad I found it.