All Comments on 'Way Too Much Information Ch. 01'

Does this sound the way you intended it? "I unzipped his pants and took my cock out." Even you have to wonder. Your cock in his pants? Possible, if you wore his pants! I have met the hero and he is I! You cannot know what others think and say when you are not in the area. This is far too complicated for you. Please get an editor!

<p>Please use an editor, or at least read through the damn story once or twice yourself, writer. This could have been a good story but instead it is a piece of shit, all because of really lousy editing.</p>

<p>It's sad to see a potentially good story thrown away because of the writer's laziness. Why bother posting if you don't have the time or inclination to look the post over for errors? </p>

your getting worst your stories are foolish.

A GREAT Story. Keep it going. Exactly how a man should treat a wife who demeans him in bed. Crush the bitch, Slirpuff!!!!!!!!

As for the story? Well if a woman wanted to stomp all over a mans pride and ego well this woman certainly did that! Did he have any justifaction for practically raping his wife? I am not sure about that one. It will be interesting what you do with part two.

GET A FUCKING EDIGOR.......Errr.....Oops.......Editor....EDITOR....E-D-I-T-O-R.....Everyone here just SCREAM......"Get an editor" BUT No ONE is ready to HELP. Forget helping, don't even ask. Sirpluff, if you want I'll be happy to look over your stories & change the BIG MESS -- 1st person to 3rd person. I'm not good writer myself, but I can HELP you with that. And if you all think you are FAR MORE BETTER -- Please someone take the lead.

I glanced through a few of his stories and they are all the same. The guy likes to fuck the woman, bitch about her cheating, but doesn't make decisions; keep saying she should think long and hard before cheaing again, or he's gonna fuck her in the ass, because his dick is smaller than her lovers. But she could decide to stay with him or leave, but that he's no longer her wimp and cuckhold and he means it! <p>

I think this writer is the Just Plain Bob guy... <p>

The thing about JPB is that he could actually write; he just chose to write total nonsensical stories about licking pussies after they've been recently fucked and then complainly only mildly about it... Slirpuff is nowhere close to having JPB's writing ability, yet an ability that never was appreciated since 99 percent of his writing were just the same stuff over and over... Oh, people glanced through them, but they never really appreciated JPB's stories as they're nothing exciting about them after a wihle, since they're all the same about poor Bill eating shit and complaining or not complaining about them but never doing any thing...

Slirpuff to Sirpluff.......slip of fingers One person to another ;-)

who can't even get tenses and person correct, ruining what might be a story no matter how good or bad it is. I want all of you to cease making contributions and enroll for a semester, or better, two - in a true english class, NOT inglis. THEN your team needs to elect ONE of you to proofread and edit whatever you as a team want to submit. If you aren't willing to do that get over it, move on and get a life ELSEWHERE!

I don't have to tell you to ignore the moaners. This is a good LV story, the type of which there are fewer and fewer on Literotica due to the rudeness of some of the commentaters.

Keep it up --- lokking forward to the rest.

I've learned my lesson. This shit-fer-brains can't keep POV straight, uses the wrong words, can't punctuate worth a damn... in other words, a typical victim of the American educational system, where self-esteem is valued above stuff like, oh, I dunno... actual learning, maybe?<p>SP, write all the crap you want. You've been offered editors' skills, and you refuse to use them. You're a disgraceful excuse for a writer, and what's worse, you won't admit it.

This first chapter of the story about Steve and Carol's marriage and personal relationship is outstanding. Emotionally, the story so far hits a height that few stories could/can match, and I feel the chapter rates a "HOT STORY" for plot development. If you can continue at an equivalent pace while retaining the high emotional level, you'll have a top story in "Loving Wives.". The only other comment I wish to make is that you sometimes need to be clearer about who is talking, or whose thought's you are stating, because I find myself re-reading some of your statements wondering if they are say or thought by Steve or Carol, especially toward the beginning of the chapter. RAG

Dude, never write again,.. my 6 year old writes with more clarity than you. Simply atrocious. Please,..if you ever find yourself starting to write another story,..take the finger off the keyboard, and use it to pull the trigger on the gun that needs to be pressed to your temple. No more you ignorant fuck!! the ctyankee

I liked it so far... You do have small problem switching back and forth between the first and third persons. Could this be an older story? It does seem to have more of this problem than the last couple of stories.. My suggestion would be to write it all in the third person; He said, she went.....

I look forward to reading the next chapter though I am bit worried about his accepting a hopeless situation. Carol has real problems.....

I really enjoy your stories. I don't understand the vitriol that some commentators give you, but it is obvious that you touch a nerve for some readers. I feel especially embarrassed with the insults, such as "anon in Obam" offers you. True, the grammar can be a little off at times, but I understand your intent, and I have to tell you, you are very creative. You come up with interesting initial scenarios to try and resolve. Sometimes, I think you resolve them a little too quickly, with some loose ends dangling. I think it is OK to take your time. I will use Sad Story 2. In Sad Story 2, legitimate issues were raised about the speed of the wife's actions to divorce as well as her subsequent actions, and her motivations. I think that this was glossed over too fast. One way around this could have been to have had a billboard before the "I Lied" billboard saying, "OK, you win, you get your divorce." Silence, all the radio chatter, then a billboard, "Can we talk?" from her, the one not saying anything. A conversation in neutral territory. That conversation can deal with these issues, leaving them unresolved, but discussed ("Well, perhaps divorce is the best thing", he said sadly), and with some time (since she is into unilateral action) and silence, perhaps a billboard from her saying, "Do you still want a divorce" and "No, but you want it" and onto a conversation pointing to either reconciliation (as she recognizes & understands his side of things as he has done the same)or not, as stubborness & pain wins. Your writing was a lot darker in Way too Much Information--the man anally raped his wife. This seems a tad out of character from the build up of the man's character. I am uncertain what the road back is for them--its really extreme. I will be interested to see what you do, but I don't get the sense there will be much room for nuance. And you have nuanced sensibility in my opinion. If you are exploring this for your own sake, rather than to satisfy those who write that your characters are wimpy, OK. But, if it is the reverse... As for the 1st 3rd person issue. I get what you are doing, but I think some people have difficulty with the switches, which can be quite dizzying at times in their frequency. You can sign post this for your audience with one of two devices. When you change cases, put a line of "******" to signal a break in your text. Alternatively, when making this transition of cases, try using a title line: "Steve's Story", then start up your story on the next line. This might be a way to help your audience follow your change of POV case. One caveat, this will work best if the changes in POV case are not too frequent (I have noticed that you have worked hard on this aspect of your writing, so there are less frequent changes). By the way, I am looking forward to next part of "A Birthday Surprise." It could go like "A Husband's Revenge" with a great setup and a pretty much standard "torch everything" ending. Or it could be a bit more subtle and creative. There is a lot going on there with lots of possible angles and avenues. Can you be creative in the resolution phase of your story? That seems to me to be your challenge.

when are people gonna realize that a mans cock size means no more than a womans ability to make her cunt smaller. Anyone that knows anything knows a woman can make her cunt tight even around a pencil dick. so many of the authors use the fact that a man has a small dick, why dont they write about a woman that has a big pussy and too lazy to make it tighten up. i enjoy u stories, this is not a ripoff on u stories. thanks

You got it going so now you need to follow threw

and get it up and running .He just did what she said she wanted. Hard and Fast Sex with No Consideration of Her Feelings. Now she has to decide what or where she go's from here.

Her pussy was just stretched out big enough it probably echoed when you talked with her legs spread. He's still a fucking wimp for not kicking her ungrateful ass out instead of moving out himself.If the stupid fucker didn't have a prenuptial agreement before he married her, then he deserves to loose all of his stuff. Just kick her fucking big pussy out and tell her to go marry an Arab, those camel jockeys are supposed to have big dicks. Then she would have her wish in being dominated.In fact she would be treated as a second class human from them, it seems that is what she wants.

<p>Even though you've heard this a <i>billion</i> times today so far, and while you have truly interesting stories, you really do need to pick a POV (Point of View). Badly.</p>

<p>Every time I start to get into the story, you switch back. First its the main character telling the story from his view point. Then you switch to third person where you are now observing the action by the wife, her friends, the wife and her friends, the wife and the mother in-law, the wife and her father, the wife and the secretary, etc</p>

<p>But then when the husband comes back on the stage, it's back to <i>First person</i> from how he see's things.</p>

<p>AARRRGGHHHH!!!!</p>

<p>The premise isn't bad, and while I'd tell the husband to walk, the problem is the same that most of us have been in the middle of, he's in love with her and will cut her more slack than he would the average stranger.<p>

<p>I'm "curious" where you plan to take the story, but the story right now has a severely emotionally damaged husband, who has been publicly humiliated by his wife who he loved very much, and who feels he has lost his self respect in her eyes and doesn't measure up, versus a selfish wife who always got everything and who was just raped by the emotional crippled husband she created.</p>

<p>Not really finding a reason to root for either one right now. If this was real life I'd tell them both to split before their marriage really got ugly</p>

-Risq

that merely panders to the selective audience of penus-obsessed fragile egos that unfortunately seem to overpopulate this site.

yea, the pov was a little weird but didnt really distract from the plot. id have to say i liked this story, but i really hope they dont stay together because come on, she fucked up pretty bad. it was a little different because the husband was trying everything possible to keep his marriage together and his wife was a complete with apparently a uber streched twat who lost respect for her hubby bc he wouldnt pretty much rape her whenever he felt like it. haha, people watch too much porn because i doubt many guys have huge cocks and 6 inches is about average and combined with his good looks and aparently to die for tongue, he should have been quite a catch. maybe im too cynical, but she was being honest and i dont see they can work it out. also, a happy ending doenst always mean the couple reconnects and realizes their love or some other bullshit. sometimes a happy ending means they break up and go about their lives, whether its with another person or whatever. i like you slirpuff and i hope you keep on writing because i can see you becoming one of this sites favorite authors.

Moron.

I am not going to dwell on the 1st/3rd person issue. Enough have been said by other commentators. The story is interesting and offers a welcome novel approach to the LV genre. It has all the typical elements of a cheating wife story (disrespect, lack of consideration, public humiliation, the husband as provider of material good or physical pleasure for the wife, selfishness, etc) minus the cheating. Carol strikes as a shallow and selfish person. Steve is the typical "nice guy". As it happens too nice for his own good. At this point in the story enough emotional and physical damage has been inflicted by both parts. The question is whether there is a way out of this mess. I see at least two options. In the first option Carol, as her friend suggests, "gets her head out of her ass" and dedicates to repair the serious damage inflicted on his husband ego and does some sort of public apology in front of their friends. Steve also has to repair the physical and emotional damage caused by his rape. As for her desire to feel "full" there are ways (Kegel exercises) to make her vagina more tight. But more important than that is a radical change of attitude towards her husband and her marriage; more respect, more attention to his needs and a more balanced relationship in general. The other possibility is that Carol is a "size queen". If that is the case nothing can be done. No matter how hard she tries, she will never be sexually satisfied by Steve, and if they stay together that may lead to future cheating on her part. The best option in this case would be a divorce. If they stay together and try to repair their marriage the new one will be completely different from the first one and will take a lot of work form both parts. Frankly I see Carol as a lazy person incapable of that kind of commitment. If Carol was my wife I would divorce her even before the rape. But that is just me. I only hope that the author comes up with a realistic conclusion to the story. Slirpuff, congratulations and keep the stores coming. If one is not perfect there is always the possibility that the next one will be. Thanks for sharing.

I can't believe the way you change from first person to second person to third person. You really need a proofreader or editor or something.

It's hard for me to say if I liked this story or not, because I was having so much trouble with the changing tenses. How many times will it take for people to complain about your poor grammar before you finally get an editor (or a good editor)? Please slow down. Don't post your stories as unedited stream of consciousness that you don't even bother to reread - spend some more time making them presentable.

I don't care how upset you may be, rape is never justified. Your "nice man" showed himself to be a jerk. Now I don't like either of them. Also, please listen to those who want you to get an editor. It should improve the readability of your stories. Just don't use the editors that Winterfrog got! Thanks for writing. Ttom

said she wanted rough sex from him and that is what she got. Personally I would never have spoken to the gold digging bitch again and divorced her stretched out ass. He should go find some nice young woman who hasnt been over stretched out yet and marry her.

I did like your story but, referring to personal experience, I wonder if the problem was her over-stretched pussy (all those HUGE cocks in the past - and maybe, to a small degree, 2 births).

She is a demanding, ungrateful bitch and doesn't recognize when she has something good and worth-while.

Cut her lose, man, and find something beter - shouldn't be too hard and can't get much worse.

Who is telling this story?

You shifted all over the place in your POV. Hard to read!!

is not the same as EXTENDZ...TK U MLJ LV NV

Are you Dan Brown? Coz' you signature resembles something out of the fucking Da Vinci Code!

No wimp here. Thanks for sharing.

Carol was being totally selfish and she also has a big mouth. Steve needs to leave and find someone who appreciates the fact that he is a great catch. Carol deserves to be alone. Ch. 2 coming up. We'll see...

what person is telling the story; you sometimes narrate as second person, then all of a sudden, you're using, "I" in the first person. Pick one and stay with it. Other than that, I love the story.

Rape's the answer

Really, proves himself to be a REAL man. What a shame was building nicely to that point.

Sarah did not become a selfish bitch because her husband every thing for her, more than likely she became that way as a reaction to why her ex husband treated so shabbily or she was that way before she met her first husband. My feeling is that she had not demonstrated that she would truly change if her husband would give her a chance. Being sorry is a very small start to personality change, I think her husband should divorce her.

And why is it that every EVERY time the protagonist in your stories talks it comes out as shouting. I have to mentally reorganize your damn sentences because it gets so annoying.

Yep, Rape sure is the answer, typical man's answer when his ego is bruised, ok so she shouldn't have disrespected him like that, but she DIDN'T DESERVE TO BE RAPED!

she didn't deserve to be raped. Kick the cunt and who bastard children out and move one. There are way to many good women out there who appreciate the good things that happen to come their way. Ones who won't complain that their world isn't perfect . Poor little cunt. Her world is only 90% perfect. Get a fucking ladder and get over it. Life can be a hell of a lot worse.

Yep, anon I agree 100%. He should have just stood there crying great big puppydog tears when he heard her, and then slowly made his way out of the house, while listening to his friend tell him what a wimp he was. I'm sure that would have made him feel much better. FUCKYOU!!!

Sure she's a stupid bitch. And he's a nice guy. Right up until he rapes her. Then all bets are off.

And this is your worst I've seen. Not so bad story-wise, but rather its execution. Did you not have your usual editor?

You got your tongue wrapped around your 'my' zipper and 'his' cock a few times, but it was an emotional story and well written.

I need a blood pressure pill before going onto the next chapter.

5*

Regards,

-Pultoy

I treated you like shit because you let me get away with it.

Make her get a vaginaplasty to tighten up her cunt.

I guess a guy needs his relief and some revenge but I would had just cummed in her face rather then the anal least she get any satisfaction or mental relief from it.

I sure hope the "end of that chapter" didn't mean a possible reconciliation because the damage was done and would probably rear it's head eventually

There is a big difference between rimming and reaming. The former he did early in the story. The latter be did at the conclusion.

So the whore tightened her cunt - big deal - dump the bitch and her kids.

Sorry, I have to add to the POV posse.

Here you change from 1st person to 3rd, then back again, not to mention tense and possessive vs plural:

"I wheeled the cart back over to her car, picked up her little girl and put her into the car seat. Carol then picked up the 1st bag, and it split down the side before she could put it into her trunk. The tears began to flow again as he began to pick up the grocery's off the parking lot, and putting them into her car. I put the remaining bags in her trunk, and shut the lid."

The third sentence should read: "The tears began to flow again as I began to pick up the groceries off the parking lot, and put them into her car."

The only way back to me would require several conditions, which I don't know if she can accept:

1) No more seeing those couples, no way can he face those guys again. If she wants to meet the ladies for lunch or a girls' night out, ok, but no more couples' nights.

2) Regular blow jobs

3) Regular anal sex

4) Limited, if any vaginal sex

5) Oral from him,if he's reasonably assured no big dicks have been there.

I frankly don't see her easily accepting 1) and 4), and if 5) isn't frequent enough she may bail.

fell in love almost at first sight, as stated. life stories told by both sides. 2 kids in residence. do you think it was an maculate conception? of course she has tried more than one cock. never bothered him before, doesn't he think there is anyone bigger than him? yes she spoke out of turn, any male can tell you that. in front of friends, bad thing to do, yes wine was involved. reverse roles, and ask what would she have done?

of honey and alum, makes it sweeter for the eater and tighter for the other guy. TK U MLJ LV NV

This has sooooooo many mistakes it's hard to read. Sorry, its probably a good story but the number of childish mistakes makes this effort not worth reading and only 1 star. Next time, proof read your crap!

was that? She may be "afraid" of him but his 6 inch dick is still to "small". Heck, now she is justified he going out a finding a big dick on a nicer guy. Now being an asshole to keeper may be better for him than being a kiss ass to keep her, but would he rather loose her or himself.

Strong story. It has got me invested.

a bit hard to tell who was talking at times. Thanks.

He's going to jail where all the animals are and it's where he belongs for raping her.

The reason I ask is, you have a hard time with the placement of your adjectives, conjunctions, pronouns and spelling, not trying to be harsh here, just to understand. Probably to late for this, seeing how many stories that you have written, but you need a proof reader. With a proof reader they may be able to help you with some of your short/abrupt endings that make no since. Also, just food for thought, you might want to add new names to you very short list, as it is most of your tales seem to be a continuance of another. This story 2 **'s. I'm not into "Raping".

On to chapter 2 to see if the author can save this one. I wish I could send a personal email to every author: Avoid "use to" (especially when it should be used to) and "used to" like the plague. You will, too often, use it incorrectly. Find something else to use. I prefer "formerly." I write it and I say it.

you sure can't write in english. try another language. pov and time are all mixed up too.

I liked the story, because it showed the different levels of people. on a one to one basis, there was a problem, communication I would say. the saying love blind comes to mind for hubby, and not appreciating what you have comes to mind with the wife. was his ego a bit fragile, I'd say yes, but only because his wife made it that way. he loved his wife admittedly, but refused to admit to himself that he wasn't filling the gap so to speak. surely he could feel that, wouldn't anyone. isn't that you don't marry a woman that's been with BBC, so you don't get hit with your not big enough later on.

Slap her around and ass rape her. Yeah, that's what a loving husband does. Boy between the two of them you couldn't make one nice person. No fun here.

her any less a stupid, selfish and hateful bitch. She just used him as a port in the storm and after she got comfortable she didn't feel she owed him any consideration at all. I can't see how you could save this one and since I have already read part 2 I know you don't.

"It's not like I called you a pencil dick did I?" – Actually, it’s EXACTLY like you called him a pencil dick!

“the guys continued to make snide comments”- With friends like that, who needs enemies?

“I spent the rest of the afternoon there,” – I thought they were at a party NIGHT, now he’s spending the rest of the AFTERNOON?

"Why didn't anyone tell me Steve was behind me?" – Why didn’t she just keep her big mouth shut?

"You know all these guys have this macho image, but a delicate ego to go with it," – As others have said, if a husband made disparaging remarks about his wife to their friends, HER ego would have NO problem with it, right? Yeah, right!

illiterate author. needs editing.

Does need editing badly, the story itself isn't bad, aside from typical spelling errors, the author simply can't decide whether he wants to do first person or third person, it often shifts between paragraphs and sometimes even from sentence to sentence.

It is Writing 101: don't change the point of view in the middle of a scene. And stick with either first person or third person, not both when writing a short story.

Take that you ungrateful c u n t

How stupid can you be? The wife, or should I say, the ex-wife, committed the cardinal sin. She criticized her husbands manhood in front of all their friends. Do you blame him for leaving? Granted, what he did at the end was downright rape. Does their marriage survive? Hmmm...

I guess being a bitch means your "nice" husband gets to rape you?

If wives were to find out that husbands revealed intimate details of marriage to same extent all wives do in their chat sessions, the wives would be furious.

Recently, I overheard four wives gossipning about husbands...telling every intimate detail. As I passed by their table on the way out I asked them would they be happy to find out that their husbands were revealing everything about them to anyone who would listen

THE LOOKS ON THEIR VERY RED FACES WAS PRICELESS. EVEN MORESO ON TWO OF THEM WHO I KNEW VERY WELL. PROBABLY UNKIND OF ME BUT I TOLD THOSE TOW I WAS SEEING THEIR HUSBANDS THAT AFTERNOON AND I ASSURED THEM I NOW HAD PLENTY TO SAY

Good thing, it was short.

Bad, the rape was uncalled for. He has a right to be pissed at the thoughtless cunt.

But, the way you wrote it, she was coming to grips with and looked like she was ready to finally mature enough to give it a real go. If he wanted.

You turned him from a victim of a selfish, uncaring bitch, to a rapist or at least a violent prick (ok, I just made myself laugh there... get it "violent prick" though I did not mean it to be a laugh)

And for anonymous below... NO men do not talk about their wives like that... criticizing body parts and such. We talk them UP not down, because with men we want other men to know we have the best woman. It is a male pride thing. A guy thing.

You do not know what you are talking about.. you are a woman trying to excuse the talk, or you are a man who has not been in a long term relationship with a good woman trying to pretend you know something about it.

I don't know how many times I have read this, and it's still a good story. I think everyone will concede that she went over the line in her talk with friends, but what she said was the truth, and he knew it. The rape scene was wrong, and he knew that also. His emotions controlled him, not the right way but so be it. Does any guy think that their wife has never had a bigger cock than theirs, I think so, but I never questioned it, perhaps I should have. Even if my wife had, I still loved her, and her me, so I was happy. The wife's comment about a cock that would make her toes curl, while in the context of the talk, was way over the line. Remember that line towards the end of the story.

The writing is terrible. Back and forth from first person to third person, constantly. Then back and forth between view points, first his then who knows.

My God I can't believe it. Rank amateurish writing.

The nice caring husband raped his wife?

I know this has been mentioned before, but this part ruined the story.

Besides, after she was raped by him, why would she want him back?

Just a few minutes before he started in on her, she told him that "and I don't know how many times I just wanted you to grab me, drag me to the bedroom and just pound the shit out of me. Not make love, just fuck me."

So he did. Maybe she didn't want it just then, but she didn't fight it, either. At no time did she tell him no to what he was doing. Was it unnecessarily rough? Yes. Was the timing bad? Yes. Was it rape? I don't think so.

Again with the "fragile male ego" bullshit? You go there almost every story, so often that I'm really doubting that Slirpuff is a man. The male ego is no more fragile than a female ego. We hear women talk about the male ego when they've done something wrong and they're desperate to minimize their culpability by implying the male simply overreacted to some trivial affront.

Slirpuff stole a scene from "Last Tango in Paris" and turned the husband into a rapist. Who cares what happens now? Let them stay together; they're both horrible people and deserve each other.

Like some of his other stories the author sometimes mix up first and third person, when it comes to the protagonist.

Not to mention misspellings and typos.

And it's spelled barbecue not Bar-BQ, it's prose, not something written on a sauce bottle.

The writer ripped off the tired old story of the crushed male ego, then on top of all of the sloppy editing and typos pointed out earlier he outdoes himself by adding physically abusive mysogynistic behavior toward the wife. Wow !!

This writer and his "alter egos" (husbands) need some serious psychiatric help !!!

Needs a shit-ton of editing! Far too many typos, grammatical mistakes, and usage mistakes, as well as convolution of writer's perspective. FFS, get some help before you butcher the language any further!

Marital rape is not erotic, it's just wrong and illegal.

The writer is making a point! See it as it is a point in a story. Him treating her like the other ass wipes was his point, for you in black and white! If you want real Life read the watch tower, oh yeah, they did bad shit to people in bibles (turned to salt nailed to a cross) hung on a tree was too easy. Who wants to read boring shit,

she shouldn’t have spouted off about his (short comings and lack off endowment) so she got treated like what she was dreaming about. She got fucked in the ass and got left on the floor.

Slirpuff didn’t glorify rape, his point was not to knock down a good guy for being good! Her own gril friends told her of her short comings. He did the same thing just in a different way (since he is involved). You would have treated any woman like that but, we are not reading about YOU.

I was supporting him till he went off the cliff and raped her.

It seems you got tired of the story and just killed it.

Bad, very very bad,.

What the guy did was rape. That would lend him in jail, what is the point?

"I couldn't climax unless he went down on me." - this is BS. 6 inches is enough for any woman to reach orgasm so this is made up by writer who is obviously a male and does not know much about that.

So his anger came from the fact that he wasn't as big as the others? I get why he'd be a little angry with his wife talking about their sex lives in front of her friends, but it's not like she destroyed his abilities in bed. He can still satisfy a woman.

He honestly comes off as an egotistical 14 year old. And he pretty much raped her in response. Your attempts to make him sympathetic just comes off as off putting how you make him sound like the victim. He's a good provider yes, but his actions were immature and deplorable.

Then again, it was probably being taunted by his "friends" that drove him off the edge.

Average dick size is 4.5 inches, mean dick size is 5 inches

His anger stems from the fact his wife was a bitch and ridiculing him and disrespecting him despite all he did for her and her bastard children

Just one exciting story so far.

Even the quirky point of view (POV) shifts are interesting, allowing you to see if from varying vantage points.

Somebody knows how to write interesting tales.

Paul in Oklahoma

The rape scene hurt the story. And one of the story tags is romance?

More than a few LW writers really don't know much about anatomy or women. Let's see...the old 6 inch penis is average canard. Actually, average is 5.17 inches according to the British Journal of Urology based on a study with a sample size of 15,000 men. 6" is 90th percentile. 4/5" below average is 10th percentile. So, the variance is relatively trivial, and the vast majority of men are close to the same size. The typical vagina is 3-4 inches in depth, but will usually stretch up to 200%. Penis size does not correlate at all with height. A guy who's 7' tall is as likely to have a micropenis as anyone else, and no more likely to be bigger than average. East Asians weren't in the sample, but everyone else was, and race does not correlate at all with penis size, despite what the purveyors of the BBC myth have to say. So, dear Hubby in the story was 90th percentile and most certainly would have bottomed out in W's vagina. W was written as having an ex and several others who were notably bigger than 6". If we were assume that there were just four, and loosely apply classical probability theory to her experience, the odds are ridiculously against it. If you assumed she had four 6" inchers in a row, the odds would be 1 in 10,000. The odds become stupider large against it if she had significantly larger penises. Bear in mind that 7" inchers are about 1 in 50. The 8 to 12 inchers so beloved of many LW authors hardly exist in the population. And what of women swooning over big dicks? From personal experience I can tell you that by just being 7" a significant number of women will be uncomfortable no matter how careful you are ("It feels like being fucked by a tree trunk"; " it feels like I'm tearing"; "It gave me cramps"). Under no circumstances would any rational male want to have a 9 inch cock. What matters is being able to stay hard and paying attention to what gets your partner off. Being really big is an advantage with fags because they fetishize cock size. Otherwise, be glad you're around average.

Finally, and hilariously, JPB wrote in a story about a woman who had had an adulterous relationship with a guy with a 9" cock and who was recalling how exciting it was to have someone big enough to hit her G-spot. The G-spot is about 2" in on the anterior wall of the vagina. Someone should tell JPB.

Carol certainly comes.off as a spoiled , lightweight bitch. What husband wouldn't be upset to hear her talking about him to her friends? The rough sex, "rape", was a reaction to her missing the way her other lovers had treated her.

To bad you didn't have him yell at her when she was complaining about him being to small to her friends, that come back that she's to loose and he should use his fist, or a baseball bat, just to touch the sides of her stretched out whore's cunt. Using her ass instead....ha, ha ha.

The rape and anal rape ruined thecstory.

"male ego" trope yet again. Do LW authors really need to continually use this slur contrived by feminists to distract attention from evil behavior by women? The W's behavior in this story is inexcusable, and you can't get to anything interesting in terms of character development or plot if the cunt's behavior is presented as wholly or partially creating an "ego" problem.

"I get all the quantity, but sometimes not the quality," Carol told them. (context) they were talking about dick size. that statement is backwards, size = quantity, how u use it would be the quality

The commenter just before me misunderstood Carol's statement.

What she was saying is that she got many times (quantity) of sex, but the individual times were not all she wanted (quality).

She could have compared it to getting all the food she could possibly eat (quantity), but it was blah food (lacking quality), that left her wishing for something tastier.

Paul in Oklahoma

The record holder as the absolutely worst bit of writing on this site and believe me that takes some doing!! Past tense, present tense all mixed up, sentences that make no sense at all and the english language butchered! Slirpuff ...hang your head with shame! Gave this a 1!

annoy hates everyone and every story on here. HIs wife cheated on him hos entire marriage and fucked over 100 men. an you image how much cum he drank cleaning up that dead bitch!??

Rape is still rape! And commas should used for a reason.

It might not be right but BOTH women and men share things about their spouses that they probably shouldn't. Guys bitch about things their wives do with their pals and girls do the same with their gfs. How many guys have said they wished their wives had bigger tits? They shouldn't do it but they do.

What she said didn't mean she didn't love her husband and didn't mean she didn't like sex with him. It wasn't ment for him to hear. While I can understand why his ego was hurt he still was acting like a pathetic immature baby. His own shouting tantrum was what exposed the issue to his guy friends who acted like jerks. I'm sorry but if this is his normal behaviour, his normal reaction then I find it hard to believe the the stuff about how great a husband he was. You just don't change from being a nice guy one day and a complete asshole the next. I've got a feeling he always was a jerk. This was really a problem that could have been solved with some honest nature discussion. Mature doesn't to this clown. NO woman needs to be in a relationship with a guy who is going to be physically abusive. Nothing excuses that.

I won't challenge anything you said except for "It might not be right but BOTH women and men share things about their spouses that they probably shouldn't." With all of my faults and between the two of us we probably don't have enough fingers and toes to count them all but this is one I don't have. I have never, ever done this going back to high school girlfriends. I will admit I listened when others did (men and women) and I learned a lot about other's likes and dislikes. But they didn't learn any details from me. I was involved with a woman that I worked with in a small office back in the '80's and SHE couldn't keep her mouth shut! We took a weekend to Chicago and she just had to give out all of the juicy details, not one word confirming anything came from me, I wasn't raised that way. I was taught to open doors for ladies not humiliate them. One other thing my mother taught me was NEVER hit a lady. She also made it clear if the LADY hit me first she was no lady and I had a right to defend myself. Within reason went without being said. I had a difficult time with the assault in the kitchen but not with what he said in the restaurant or at the kitchen table Before the assault. I do and did respect your point of view, thanks for sharing it. Signed: BTW