by Manofthehillpeople
get a good editor and do a rewrite AND NEVER EVER POST A STORY WITHOUT GOING THROUGH A GOOD EDITOR FIRST.
DBRS
Man! you have amazing imagination.
I'm eagerly waiting for you to post the next chapter.
Keep up the good work!
God you guys are so picky when it comes to grammar.. Who cares if he used "to" instead of "too",...
Anyways, great start to this story.. Absolutely can NOT wait to read the next chapter.. Hoping it comes soon :)
Please learn the difference between too and to, as well as then and than. Almost every time you use too, you should be writing to. The same goes for Then. Flunk 6th grade English did you?