All Comments on 'What Started As Fantasy...'

Hope you all like it. It's my first story, so any feedback would be greatly appreciated!!

This was a great read....I would like to see further character development. How does this tryst affect the relationship with the boyfriend ? Is he a sub as well ? Does she enlist Michaels' help in training her boyfriend to be Dom ? Does the boyfriend walk in on the two of them ? Does Michael walk in on her and the boyfriend and show him what needs to be done ? Further stories about her and Michael....Does he catch her at work or school ? I'll watch for further reads.....

Your story is really good I enjoyed it, but be careful about your plot; a lot of the sexual toys he played with - rubber band, string etc seemed to come out of nowhere and it wasn't very clear what position she was in so that she could not see her assailant.

This was a good story, I'd like to see more between Michael and Sarah, not so much Kale.

& I know that some time has passed, but you really ought to think about furthering this story; some of the suggestions given above merit serious consideration for inclusion in the potential series, also. It would certainly be interesting(& quite a challenge for any author, IMHO), for example, to read how you were able to bring Kale into the mix- maybe as a sub, as suggested above. His gentler nature, along w/ presumable relative inexperience(compared to the older man, Michael, that is...) would certainly make for a good twist in the plot. Lastly, it would also make for a great continuation to the overall plot if Sarah took her newfound experience(a summer's worth, I mean) to college, maybe finding new partners & adventures? In any event, great story!

That was awesome!!

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