All Comments on 'When My Dreams Cum True'

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. . . but I enjoyed it. It was almost a stream-of-consciousness essay as opposed to a story, but was still quite erotic. Thanks.

This is a lovely, arousing description of first class lovemaking. It needs a careful proofreading to remove some errors which spoiled the mood, for me at least. Spellcheck won't do it. Also, correct English is: 'I was lying on the bed.', not 'I was laying on the bed.' You can lay a book on the bed. You can speak of yourself in the third person and say: 'Now I lay me down to sleep', as in the children's bedtime prayer.

In any case, a nice story. It raised my heart rate!