All Comments on 'When We Were Married Ch. 05A'

Much too late to do anything about it, but waters are "roiled," not "rolled."

Murder trials in the U.S in LW stories seem to last about 1/10th the time they do in the U.K.!

This was worse than others. Not only did he commit a discovery violation but his closing committed several offenses that were mistrial worthy. In real life, a mistrial is granted and she walks on double jeopardy grounds.

Uh-oh. Trouble is back. At least times with Aline are romantic, uplifting and bitter-sweet in this gloomy angstfest.

Great suspense, great action, the good guy might get the girl and ride off into the sunset... maybe. Thank you.

Woohoo! Aline is back!!

Very interesting. A little bit too long in the courtroom but still keeping my attention. Glad Bill is getting some and skank slut isn't. Please don't turn her into a victim and let her off the hook. She's a self-absorbed tramp and if you change her this late in the story it will be terrible!

2nd reading for me and if anyone is interested the next part has an Outstanding !!!! scene involving Aline and Bill and his family, so read on.

5 Stars on this one . Can I get Aline's number ?

Some unprofessional conduct in the courtroom but still a great read.

As another commenter said, it's difficult to put this series down, even if it is the second time I've read it. No criticism and the story or the writing of , there are few sentences that didn't quite read right, it does need some beta reading, but still a great story.

MORE OF ALINE PLEASE!!!

Lews questioning, while not asking a question doesn't seem feasible. That said, I haven't been able to put this series down. I hope we hear back from the Priests son. 5 for the book.

The court scenes in this chapter were the worse written I have ever encountered, they were completely wrong, attorneys asking no questions of witnesses but providing testimony themselves. It would have taken very little effort to get this correct.

hmm at this point I feel like we got a bit too much "filler".

Also Aline is back, just why?

So.....what is Debbie going to do know? Bill's getting plenty of nooky and frenchy is back?

Definitely my Favourite.. even if it ended here. Bill got his Aline.. The End.

This is epic, what a wonderful tale of heartbreak and rising from the ashes!

Five stars except I don't think attorneys either prosecuting or defence can carry on a conversation with s juror during a trial. Only during the selection process.

This is basically a "Made for TV" story. A series. At times this has been a very good story. Some not so. But just the same riveting. When I hit the end I'll rate it.

I love Bill , I am 45 but i can understand the magnetic attraction he has with women he wouldn't want me, who would when they can have the lovely Aline, but how can anyone say he is not worse than Debbie. He is prepared to fuck a friends wife while she still loves her husband, she is a much bigger slut than Debbie was. Come on you Debbie haters, whose done the most wrong, between the three of them, sorry I am in Debbies corner.

Many women would look at a husband like him and realize he was a Paladin holding the bridge and be proud to hold the home sanctuary for him. She thought her body was enough and he should be satisfied with whatever leavings she could save for him. No respect absolutely none for him or his calling.

"And Bill didn't have any friends, not any real friends. Apparently a lot of people respected him, but he wasn't the type to go out drinking and he'd never gone out to a bar with the guys or to sports events. Because he was either working or home watching television with his wife and kids.

It was strange, she thought, that she could recognize that now, when she couldn't before. Bill had spent too much time at work, but any free time he'd ever had he'd spent with her or the kids. Maybe he had been dull as hell, but he had always come home."

Debbie fucked some 20 guys by the time she was 15, gangbanged in college, apparently raped by three pieces of shit who should be physically castrated before being dead and didn't tell her husband; time will tell how she got into that position in the first place but I have my suspicions, no matter if she didn't fuck them she was cheating every time she let someone feel her up, fucked Douch while she was still married in the marital bed among other places, coming on to Lew and all of the rest of her whore actions to degrade her husband = you can't take the slut out of the girl. She'll wake up eventually, but I'd move heaven and earth to be with Aline, the next time I danced with Aline I'd ask the band to play Jay and the Americans "Cara Mia" and "This Magic Moment". Signed: BTW

Bill is having a day.

but beware.......the price of fame detracts, TK U MLJ LV NV

Truly a great story. You are so very talented. Just wanted to add my 2 cents. Can't wait any more to roll to the next part. Love Aline!!

(1) Finding out there is good sex after divorce without having to pay for it.

(2) Scaring the vehicular homicide culprit into taking the State's please bargain by his presence alone.

(3) The reappearance of Aline.

re:

Idle Thought

This doesn't apply strictly to this chapter, but Debbie always claimed that her attraction to Bill wasn't just "hero worship", that she really loved him.

But when things go difficult, when he got out of shape and dedicated too much to his work, where was that "love" then?

I know it's been said many times (including by me!), but she supposedly can get any man to bend to her will with a crook of her finger, yet she is powerless to get the man who loves her deeply to hit the gym and cut back on his hours?

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Must be that the saying:

"The only thing that gets most men into the gym is divorce court"

is true.

This doesn't apply strictly to this chapter, but Debbie always claimed that her attraction to Bill wasn't just "hero worship", that she really loved him.

But when things go difficult, when he got out of shape and dedicated too much to his work, where was that "love" then?

I know it's been said many times (including by me!), but she supposedly can get any man to bend to her will with a crook of her finger, yet she is powerless to get the man who loves her deeply to hit the gym and cut back on his hours?

I still can't get over Debbie's attitude towards her breasts - she talks about flat-chested women, when she REALLY means anybody with smaller boobs than her! Then, when someone like Myra shows up with bigger boobs, suddenly they're a "cow" with "udders"!

"You like that Mr. Maitland? Feel that?" - Um, they're having sex, and they're not on a first-name basis?

"We're two old friends who finally scratched and itch. That's all." - While I guess it's cool that she's not LOOKING for some sort of a commitment, I find it a little odd that she's pretty much arbitrarily ruling it out.

"Deb has got to be eating her heart out seeing you get younger and hotter." - Yep, as he gets older, he can keep working out and still look good. She can keep working out, but nothing short of a boob job is going to keep those tits (or is that "udders"?) from sagging.

I loved how he scared the hit-and-run defendant into taking the plea deal, and I REALLY loved the return of Aline!

low self esteem

with a God Complex

an interesting mix

Glad for the recap in pars. 2 and 3, been so long ago I forgot all that.

So Bill is making up for lost time, plugging women quite quickly now.

Finally, why did I not expect to have seen the last of Aline in Ch. 4?

Lew can't have it both ways.

He claims that Ballantyne testified to avoid an accessory charge.

But if, as Lew says, there was no murder, then there can be no accessory to murder. If Ballantyne says that Granny never planned to kill her husband, then how can Bill prosecute him for not going to the police with her plan?

It's sort of a Catch-22.

This chapter really showcased your great talent, so much so that it could almost have been a good stand alone story A N D that is becoming a major problem with this tale.

This is whole long saga was supposed to be about Bill & Debbie, their problems & how they dealt with them or so you wrote in earlier chapters & notes, but now it seems more like what a great prosecutor Bill is becoming. I can see in future chapters Bill dealing with different cases, such as the black cop, the drug overlord etc, which means more bloody legal battles & courtroom dramas, no wonder it's so long. I'm at the stage now where I wish it would just end & soon, but there's 7 more to go & I never give up reading a story once started unless the writing is crap. Unfortunately you're a good writer, you started with a great plot, moved along ok for 2 - 3 chapters then got side tracked with silly little sub plots, so I'm stuck suffering through numerous chapters still to go. What a waste of your talent. Would have been a 5 ***** if a stand alone but in context of this tale just 2**

I love the R Heinlien quotes, he's my favorite author and I love his stuff. Make sure you've read "The Lives of Lazarus Long"

This is a great story and GREAT writing. Keep it up Dan and ignore these fools. Perhaps posting this up in sol would be a good idea...

Hey the guys EX has a PhD a Doctorate, why not play up her education against her stupidness....bill

life

I sure don't agree with the other comments....That was the first chapter I gave a five.

BS. CRAPOLA IS WHAT

All that cursing on the witness stand. Conversing with a juror. BS

Why Aline? This is going to turn out bad. She's still married for crying out loud! NO! Bill should be there for Debbie, even if she's a lusty, horny bitch. She's not looking to hot and he just smirks at her? Now he's the one pissing on their 20 years of marriage. Sure, he let himself go, sure she was a bitch to rub her disdain for him in his face, sure she was the one to bury the marriage by rubbing his face again when she told him she didn't love him anymore, but he's pissing on a grave they both still care about by not showing ANY compassion for his unfaithful wife. The 'bigger man' would face the problem instead of hoping time will wash it away. The way things are going, Bill doesn't deserve much more pity than Debbie, if any more.

I wonder why this story continues. Wait we still have the mystery of Debbie's illness which will be the reason for her being a bitch. I am about a month (i.e., 2 chapters) behind the story which is fine. I will finish it when the last chapter goes out. No matter what other women come into Bill's life my predication is that there will be a great reconcilation between Bill and Debbie. I liked the courtroom drama but it is subordinate to the martial focus of the story. I can not wait until you finsh this story because I believe that future ones with be better and shorter.

you had enough time to do it right and we waited this long.take your time and do your story right your way.don't fuck up a wet dream.thanks for your story and you are a star writer.

There are only two possible endings one could be typical DQS 'only thing which matters is what big boobie wife wants" or it would be story of movie 'Meet the Bill'.

DQS is very talented in using controversy for popularity of story, which was supposed to be 2 or 3 chapter story is now 5x4 probably more. because he does not want to lose the importance he got here.

Good Luck to you.

Even though the court action is a little far fetched, the outcome is understandable. I would buy the book because it is hard to put down for the evening. Keep up the outstanding work.

we had comments from fake DQS, now readers are getting annonymous mails? wow.......I am sure it will all end once a new chapter is published on the website.

Dear MS Anonymous:

I AM SURPRISED THAT YOU ARE NOT AWARE THAT A dumb illiterate person usually does not know that she is dumb and illiterate. So, girlfriend, don't waste your time telling her what not to do.

I hit a nerve with my previous comment.didn't I, babygirl.

I LOVE YOU TOO, babygirl

I really enjoyed the story. Thanks for sharing it with us. You kept me so engrossed that I could hardly wait to read the next chapter. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.

Thanks for the update.

I just posted 5B. The way things go it will probably be posted Tuesday or Wednesday, although I could hope for Monday. As I mention in an editorial note, this is not what i'd intended 5B to be. It's only about 12000 words, 4 Lit pages, but I thought i'd hit a natural stopping point. Despite the fact it was hard as hell to write, I enjoyed it. I hope readers like it. 5B will be at least two chapters now, maybe three. And there will be more after it. This has turned into a second life for me, but I am still enjoying the product.

Fantastic, I cannot seem to stop reading your work. I seldom comment. However, you do deserve the acompliment. Most works, I don't bother to finish, let alone comment. There are a few authors here that do hold my attention. You are one. PLEASE keep up the great work.

Thank you, Jennybear!! I’ll kept your comments in mind whenever I have the urge to make nasty critical comments. I now realize that authors really are good people, and only publish to remain active and creative; and to provide readers the products of their labor as a way to spread joy, love, goodwill, and the opportunity to learn new survivsl skills.

PS -----Oh, by the way, I rarely comment on stories, and when I do its to praise the author. DQS1's WWWM has been the exception, in part because I believe that while she may be very smart she is also intellectually dishonest and maniputive.

I've been frequenting this site for six years. Initially I was hesitant to post a comment. I didn't want to sound too naive or stupid. However, I got over it and eventually became quite bold. TheCelt wrote a story "Billy” that bothered me greatly. I wrote my own ending and sent it to him. No, he didn't bite my head off but encouraged me to write more and even sent some of his stories to me to fashion an ending. He is a class act. <P>

From then on, I developed an appreciation for what authors do. They get no monetary reward. All they receive is our appreciation and sometimes our abuse. <P>

Like the rest of y'all, I'm pissed with the sporadic posting; However, I don't want the story to end. Some of us beseech Q to let us know what's going on. While others say shut up and write. <P>

To paraphrase curiousss: If you can't change it, you might as well learn to let it go. <P>

Thank you my friend for writing and all the enjoyment you have given me. <P>

Jen

Interesting comments!

Hay guy, "gnu" that, but just being a smart ass for a little levity "WHILE WE WAIT".

AND A GREAT BIG THANK YOU FOR YOUR SERVICE TO OUR COUNTRY.

Tom.

OK,OK!! Since we are fellow Vietnam vets, the "ghe" should have been "the". I was a little under the weather when I wrote that comment.

Authors do it all "GHE" time!

WHAT THE HELL IS "GHE"?

I've decided to wait until enough chapters are available to continue to read wwwm. You are one of 6 authors I can count on to provide a good read.

Thanks, I really needed that!!

Lier. I say this with the offer of a beer and a valium, along with a pat on the back. I think you need it.

It's Liar

...histrionics and "I'll stop reading if..."ers.

Please go about your business and post when you can without regret, guilt or pressure. Such a great story deserves restraint in our urgings and a thought about the old saying which approximates to changing what we can whilst accepting that which we can't and having the wisdom to know the difference.

Thanks for the update. I look forward to 5B and, until it's posted, I'll just live a normal life kicking the cat and hunting reluctant lemmings.

DQS!: The great manipulator and lier!!!

I am sure many authors believe they are writing to please themselves. While there may be a grain of truth in that observation, the impulse to publish in a public forum is also motivated by the strong desire for ones work to be acknowledge and appreciated. Authors really care about what readers think about their work, and many are willing to go the extra mile to tailor their storyline to conform to what readers desire and expect.

DQS! Has done an excellent job lying to herself and readers, and manipulating readers’ POV regarding WWM. To appreciate this all one needs to do is compare her explanations of the delay in posting 5b with the explanations given in two previous UPDATES. Ask yourself whethr you are willing to wait for her to complete 5-6 additional chapters. In Augus, she encouraged readers frustrated with the timing of the posting of cnapters to check back in two months (about mid-Oct). Lier, lier!!

IN my opinion, authers’ owe readers a reasonable approximation to the TRUTH. If you consistently fail to follow your own timeline, maybe its time you shutup, and simply post chapters as they are completed. Authors do it all ghe time, why can’t DQS1.

hi there my name is Michelle Coward

can you PLEASE PLEASE hurry and finish

let me know when it is finish

ivorysnow_152@hotmail.com

Sorry so many expectations seem to have taken their toll, but hey, it's better than the alternative. You could have all this pressure, no creativity, people could hate what you write AND... you could be ugly! Lol.

Glad to see an update.

Rob

I appreciate all the emails I've gotten and the comments on this chapter. I wish there was an easier way to get a message out to everyone following the story. In an earlier post I mentioned the problems I've encountered. I'm still in the middle of those but coming out of them. I did hit a sort of writer's block. I had a hard time getting into this chapter and figuring out how to get to the next one. 5A jsut flowed, and 5B is like chiseling words out of stone. But this has happened to me before. It might be that this one has been hard to write because it involves one of my favorite characters and a lot of stuff happens. It's not exactly a writer's block becuase I've finished 10,000 words already, but that's probably not a third of the length of the finished chapter. I've started thinking about breaking it so I can publish something, but I haven't made up my mind yet.If I go the way I'm thinking, I'll probalby finish the chapter and it will be a long one. Anyway, I am still writing, I will finish 5B and some readers will be happy and others saddened by the ending of the chapter. But that's not the end of the story and things could change again. As always, I'm honored by the fact that so many of you have become engrossed in the story and I'm honestly going to miss it when it ends - probably go into withdrawal. (That won't be for at least another 5-6 chapters and probably more) I might be a little burned out after all this is over, but I've got so many things I want to write after WWWM that I can't imagine staying away too long. Anyway, it's late, I've stayed up later than I can afford to typing away on 5B, and I'm going to wrap this.

Story is my all time favorite. Chapters just can't come quick enough, and since the last posting seems like forever. Hope everything is all right, and i'm looking forward to the next chapter.

Im hoping he ends up with the French chick!

As DramaQueenSir1 was failure,( after introducing very dramatic line in the end of many chapters, and it was always Boo in next chapter, so this time he is taking time to come up with something better, to justify latest scene,) hope he gets what he's searching, although we all know the end to this story, Debbie giving Bill hot sex, and he crawling back to her, like nothing happend, you know no one can resist BigBoobs, (in his world) and beauty(==boobs size),

if boobsize(A) > boobsize(B)

then=> beautiful(A) > beautiful(B)

I've re-read this chapter at least four times. I admit it. You've got me on the edge of my seat waiting for the next thrilling installment.

Please get your real life in order and come back to fantasyland as soon as you can.

Thank you for your wonderful stories. They are the best!

give yourself a big pat on the back & accept a salute from me. This was the best chapter so far. Ya know what, you should feel very proud for writing this story. YOu have set a benchmark for others and I can see other writers have started compairing their work with yours. I can also see people are trying to imitate you by creating fake DanielQSteele1 username. Wow we have fake kelly and bartolo too lol.

Any chance we could know about the next chapter? You have stopped at such an interesting twist. It's going to be a month now......

Thank you for this story. I would like to see you get them back together but they seem awfully far apart. Bill still cares for Debbie. It doesn't appear that Debbie cares anything about Bill though. Looking forward to the next chapter!

Sorry you punish us. what is wrong with you are very late. please for the heaven sack upload Ch. 05B

Addisu from Ethiopia

Still no updates. Sad :-(

Some of you have mentioned Back To Bristol by Gary APB. It is a good story also. But,it is a long story about a weak man and his feelings.Read The Bean Counter by Creamer.It is long too,but he is not cryer.

I hate that my favorite stories translate so poorly to the screen. Too many details that make the story great would be lost in a movie or series. Your characters are rich and vibrant. Their depth would be lost in film.

Publishing is definetly a great idea. Your G.A.N. (monetarily) might be a reward better appreciated, than the praise you receive from your fans here on Literotica.

He accepted the challenge by JennyBear and she almost killed him in bed.In one week he will be back... :}

which real characters you see in story, a professor whose IQ is to level where she thinks she can kiss a stud in public on stage like some teenager in front of everybody and still deny it to husband, who probably been raped, and sulking in corner, a wimpy ass who refuses free pussies, and chats with his wife's lover, A wife who hurt her husband and given him biggest pain and act like no one care for him, more than her when it comes to public, (she is the one who made him ass, with her lover), i had not seen any talented lawyer in Main char, all he do represent proofs he already have, and is feared for no reason.

A great story and a writing style that allows the reader to actually live it. I see some readers think you should publish which I really don't agree with. I think it should go straight into production as a weekly series on television. You have created some very realistic characters and a story line that not only is entertaining but hard to put down. Thank you and Congratulations, my hat is off to you.

I think you should honestly consider publication of WWWM in the not too distant future. Have you as yet consulted with anyone in the literature departments of Universities for their opinions and suggestions? Of course, Debbie has too many scenes with raw sex; you'll want to tone that down a bit, though I'm sure some disagree with me. Another possibility is an R-rated movie. The subject manner is simply too appealing to people generally, in many regards, to pass up the opportunity. The movie industry ain't what it use to be, but more than enough people still watch movies.

This material is most definitely publishable quality. Get off the pot and damn well do so!

Thanks. Righting is a word I would in the context of maybe righting a ship that was listing either to port or starboard, not in the context of writing a comment.

I got this email yesterday ----- Can you tell us what 'your are' means? Or maybe 'righting'? I would be very pleased to know.

There's no such word called 'your are' I meant 'you are' that was a mistake on my part, and I'm not ashamed to accept it . As for 'righting', many writers have used that word for the actual word 'Writing', I should've made that clear.

Vietvet: I respect you and your comments.

The story is getting better by each episode. the last one was a masterpiece. . i am sure its poised to get even better with coming episodes. . i wish u get more free time atleast to keep us hooked on to the stories. . . .lol.. .

Hey dude

After completing this awesome piece of literature . I request you to please seriously think about publishing this as a book . . .I am sure it ll be a sure hit among adults. . . Its a marvelous story . .

Hey dude u r awesome man . . I have been continuously reading the story from the beginning for the past 2 weeks whenever i get free time . . Ppl have already told everything abt the story i really dont have any more words to tell abt ur awesome skill dude . to simply put it i am damn addicted to the story now. . i cant think of anything else untill i get to know wats coming up next . .

He might be a laugh because his language is so bad he's a joke but the sick fuck is still at it. Now we have 3 fake IDs, the first without the 'e' in Steele, the second with capitals i for the l in 'Daniel' and 'Steele'; the third with capital i for l just in 'Steele'.

kelly_kelly, bartolo - anybody with an 'l'.

If Lit used the same font that shows all capital letters uniquely like on the member page this stuff wouldn't be possible.

The real laugh is I love to see somebody working so hard just to be the fuckwit he already is. If there is such a thing as anonymous fame, you're there pal, you've done it.

I suppose the next step is sympathy!

You are fake too, why dont you leave us alone

he also made one for me.

.. I hope he doesn't disappoint..

Well, at least the comments are a laugh. This imposter guy is impersonating kelly_kelly now - look at the profile section of "kelly_kelly's" last post.. the name is keiiy_kelly with capital "i's" in the first name. He obviously craves attention, you'd think he could add something constructive instead of being an ass.

hey thats between me and Jen, btw you cute too, but am sure thats not ur pis either, where did you get those, you fly too or just for show.

You after Jen, Jen this Jen that, wow you have to ask her everything, she is cute isn't she, if thats her pic on profile.

It is Fun, while we wait,

For the fun of it while we wait for the "REST OF THE STORY".

....bother trying to figure stuff like that out, on a site where you can pretend to be anyone. What can you trust here again????

******* As far as I know I am the one and only ;'real' DQS1 and I've been away for awhile. Until tonight I wasn't aware of the flap from a pseudo DQS1 posting on here. I appreciate some readers catching the fact it wasn't 'me'...I know I've gotten comments from kellykelly in email that made me a little curious about what was going on and got me to reading the comments on 05A again.

********I'm probably not going to delete the pseudo DQS1 comments unless readers really want me to. I generally let anything and everything stay on unless someone asks me to remove something they've posted.

*********To make things perfectly clear, I haven't gone away. I've just hit a trifecta of bad stuff - physical, jobwise and personal. Primarily, I'm working my ass off at my primary job - the one that pays for a roof over my head and food in the mouths of myself and my family. I've been having guilt pangs about not being able to post a new chapter, but I have to keep reminding myself that Lit is a hobby...one I love but a labor of love. I've gone through some changes that have drastically reduced the time I have free to work on WWWM.

********I haven't give up, haven't quit, haven't hit writers' block (maybe a tiny little bit of one but nothing serious - not compared to 17-year writer's block I went through once upon a time) and I will still finish WWWM. I hope when I do post WWWM5B in a week or so readers will think it was worth the wait.

*********I know this will be a long wait but there's not much I can do about that. I can only thank those of you that are hanging on and reading each new chapter.

Touchet, but I have tried to read a couple of stories with this same language profile and notice some of the same misspelled words such as "DOUGHTER" instead of daughter, and they all come from overseas as far as i can tell by their profiles.

But Alas, you are correct, there are submitters here that cant spell "SIC UM"

VET

Yes, I see now that if you click on his cored name the name appears as you say. Thank you.