All Comments on 'When Words Wander'

Tragically, we will never know what level of excellence Josephus would have achieved as an author. Perhaps there is a parallel universe in which he lived and developed his skills to rheir full measure. I surely hope so.

“It talked about how much better and easier it was on the children if one parent died instead of losing one to a divorce.”

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Which is why the only correct response to the events in this story is for the slut to die. He’s an auto mechanic. Several ways to remove her as a problem, and some of them don’t even risk harming others!

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ZK

It was a collaborative success with a positive ending for Jonathan and family. The crucible of doubt and stress that Susan put him through was balanced by the attempted wake up call by Lauren and Rich. This ending was satisfying. Great job

Nice ending to those other pieces. This is nice work you have put up, I was glad to read it and learn just a bit about you, I think, in the process, especially with the end note you included.

Sorry to have lost you, 17 years ago. If your writing is any indication, your family and friends lost a treasure.

⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ Much better!

A great sequel to an otherwise painful and sadistic original story. Wow Susan was such a cancer. Was a revelation to see Rich wake up. Good story. 5 stars. RIP Josephus.

A good and informative tale. Give stars from me. Sorry about joesephus. I hope his family is carrying on well. It is hard

JPB

Overall well done story and appreciated.

All the best to the author's widow and children. Hopefully they have been able to keep him a cherished part of their lives while growing forward and living an engaged life. <3

Why does this DUMBASS writer tell us he's writing a continuation and advises us the READ the works leading up to this piece (three of 'em), and then the idiot spends the first third of the story telling us what we already read?! SMH! Another barely-there amateur who needs an editor.

Five Stars. Edge of Sundown? Grow up, kid. Oh, and piss off.

Dee

@Ruttweiler

All those words and you're still a cream pie eating, simp bitch, cuckyboy. But thanks for all the bullshit you spewed about what you want us to believe you are....

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2nd reading for me. Like the last 2 pages best, although the Lawyers and Rick showing Susan what a misguided woman she was, was also good. LOL for her 3td marriage.

Have any of you fools read the author's bio? He was killed in an automobile accident in 2007, and a friend updated his bio in 2017. Please read it--the entire thing.

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So, don't be an idiot and name-call or piss all over a man whose life was cut tragically short at 25. He left behind a wife who was an Afghanistan veteran of the Marine Corps.

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Consider that tragedy, as you whine, cry, and moan about a FREE story. Know too, that any number of these writers have departed this sad vale, and what you think, say, or write about them only diminishes YOU. Now, get a life while you still enjoy that incredible gift.

Here's the sentence that sums up this incredible story: \\\You didn't give him emotional support, and instead of getting a part-time job so he wasn't working himself to death to give you the comfortable life you wanted, you took a lover so you could give to another what you weren't willing to give to Jonathan./// It separates women's rights from the highly toxic chemical that is modern American feminism.

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Not sure if OP is an attorney or a Jedi, but everything feels authentic, gritty, and familiar. As a family law attorney of many years, this story resonates with me, and it should resonate with the reader, too. In fact, this story should be required reading before a marriage license is issued in the Great State of Texas. Booo-yah! Five Stars!

Ruttweller, I love your put down of the cowardly 'Anon.' aren't they all, I hate them. How can they be allowed to sometimes destroy an author's life, hiding like they do, behind a mask, why does Literotica allow them. I didn't mark the story, it just wasn't for me. I believe the author is deceased, so can't come back with a defence of anything negative that I say.

I assume you're talking about me? You believe I am a "total self-entitled narcissistic homo..."

Self-entitled? I claim no titles. I comment, as do you. I registered on the site several years ago, so I am certainly more courageous than YOU, who hide behind the anonymous label. You can look at my other comments, and hate those. You're just another anony.

Narcissistic? Where do you get that? Do you know what a narcissist is? I don't think so. I don't think I'm all that important. I'm just a guy from the West Coast. I may be smarter than you, but that's probably it. Donald Trump is a narcissist. He puts his name on everything. He has spent his life trying to be important. He is becoming merely impotent.

Homo? Sorry, big fan of the pussy here. Love 'em. Can't get enough of them. THAT has gotten me into sooo much trouble in my life. I love to see them in any state, resting and in action. If I did lean in that other direction, I could always read Gay Male, which I don't. Not that I'm judging, mind you.

You say I'm an idiot and a coward, and live in my mom's basement? I know for certain that I'm smarter than you, so that makes you...what? Can you guess?

Coward? I put my handle up on my comments. You?

Basement? I own my own home in Southern California. We don't have basements. My mom is no longer living. She also never owned a basement, so...

These great male virtues you speak of, that I presumably know nothing of, courage, valor, self-respect and honor.

We have already dealt with your "courage", so on to "valor". That's something mainly found on the battlefield, not found arguing on a smutty website. So fuck you.

"Self-respect". That's important. One needs that every day. You can't face the World adequately without it. I can't prove I have it, but here I am, defending myself, and not hiding behind "anonymous".

"Honor" You're looking for honor on a jerk-off website? As in masturbation and stroke-fantasies? Wow, are you setting your sights low.

If you're serious about "courage, valor, self-respect and honor", they why don't you go volunteer in a place and situation where those virtues matter, instead of complaining on a whack-off website.

Miss you, Joe.

This clown below is a total self-entitled narcissistic homo, who doesn't know a God darn thing about any male virtues : courage, valor, self-respect, or honor . His comments on other stories show he is a idiot and a coward and only leaves his moms basement for dinner, his proudest possessions are his participation trophies from junior high.

If I had wanted a lesson in morality, I could have picked up any number of books, or gone to many other websites.

Plus, the ridiculousness of the suicide element. He has kids, he wouldn’t turn to blowing his brains out, and if he did, he’s not the same character. And the complete about-face of the Rich character seems ridiculous in comparison to the original. Everyone around Susan suddenly is or becomes paragons of propriety. Except Susan.

It was just too obviously moralistic and out of place to be enjoyable. It’s as weird as reading a gang-bang story in the book of Samuel.

It's good to read a story where the father actually fights for his children,and does what he can to minimize the influence that the cheating partner has in their lives.

Heh. Just to balance, I liked the moralizing and NOT the drama.

I gave this 4 stars instead of 5, because the piece of shit ex didn't get her just desserts. Yes, I can see all the arguments why Jonathan didn't burn her to the ground. BUT... the author could have karmically punished her his own way, without dirtying Jonathan's hands, mind or morals. That's why he's the work's creator, he has choices.

I think you did a fantastic job on this follow up story segment. It is a compliment to the original series.

Thanks for your writing.

That was a slog. Just too unrealistic to have any merit. I think the author was trying to do a lot of moralizing to the readers and it detracted from the drama. The dialog dissolved into a boring repetitiveness.

Thank you for this ending!!! 5*

A finishing story much better than the originals. Thanks for this story.

Best alternate ending of an original.story that was quite pedestrian and unrealistic. Thr four year twist was interesting. So was Mark and (especially) Laura. The collaborative process was intriguing. Susan bringing the diary into the whole thing was a twist (of her selfish stupidity). Was also refreshing at some levels to see Rich drop her ass based on moral reasons so he good get his soul back. Susan is the prototype for the "me me me" spouse. Kids were good too. Cindy saving her father with the bullets taken out was quite captivating. Spouses threatened with divorce should always speak to their own attorney. It is (usually) never as bad as thenother party threatens it will be. Kids are better raised with divorced parents than thr parents "toughing" it out in a broken homr with their parents despising each other. Susan was delusional and really self-centered. Like how her latest wedding is like number four in 9 years (three as a bridesmaid and at least once as a flower girl for poor Nancy). Well written. Thr bsse storybline from the original author sucked.

Excellent!

Superior ending to a faltering mediocre original story... great save! ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐

great remake of Nicci's story, which was also a good story. Your part of Susan's diary was great.

If someone was ever going to create M/C that made cheaters of a certain mode, pay violently for their deeds, this cheater would be a strong candidate. I could see the " Score Keepers Proxy" bestowing a severe punishment on the cheating wife. A person who is so wrapped up in "what about me" deserves to experience a severe BTB type of retribution...

A good version of an average original tale. Actually a great version. The best part was the conversations that shed light on the cheaters self absorbed behavior. Also she was panted much more accurately.

Excellent story. Read it several times over the past your.

Very well done. Instead of WHAM! BAM! PUKE! CRY! that most authors bestow on their MMCs. This one took a different road and was very well done.

Kudos.

Wow talk about cliche upon cliche upon fucking STUPID so the husband is basically John Wayne without the personality or the intelligence just great

Excellent. Liked Lawyer Laura most of all. Emotionally shallow Susan partially reminded me of my exwife, all about her and not having the courage to discuss anything. Of course the good guy ends up wife a younger, beautiful, supportive 2nd. wife.

Jonathon was right about one thing. One of them needed to die. Too bad he didn’t have balls enough to make that happen. It would have been a less painful and much shorter story.

Quaint, once fashionable leftist take on feminism. It wasn't true then, and only someone cognitively impaired can believe that drivel today.

EXCELLENT STORY! 5 STARS.

So it wasn't a seal story or spec ops protag. Those are MORE realistic.

Once again, A great story from an author who is greatly missed. Still don't care for lawyers at all.

Another interesting ending. I’m not sure I’ve ever seen the woman get burned the most by her own lover, but man he absolutely obliterated her. That was a much bigger takedown than Laura’s. That’s one many people don’t recover from and it’s clear from the epilogue that she didn’t given that she’s clearly a miserable person at the end still.

Great story..... RIP

Scores 5/5

A MUCH better ending. Thank you.

Laura's rant to Susan was pretty much my feelings not just about Susan but Nici as well. I try not to shit on authors (try not always successful mind you) but the story that started these sequels was seriously out there.and that's being kind. There are a few other stories on here that attempt to pull the same shit. Its an agenda that boils down to this: the husband will provide for all financial and emotional support while simultaneously ceding all power and decision making to the wife. She doesn't have to reciprocate unless she decides so to do. The marriage may or may not be open but if so it will only be partially open because the husband must be completely available to the wife and family at all times. Therefore the wife may have lovers but he may not. This would not be cheating mind you, he supports completely. Whether the husband is granted sex is only a priority if the wife desires it so. If the husband is humiliated then well, his love is supposed to be all encompassing.

That is the agenda with the original. Its been repeated very recently and once again a lot of sequels.

Josephus, sorry you are no longer with us. You did a fantastic job. This feminist is with you 100%

It's just sad what the wicked witch did to him

But the world’s best Hamburg flippers don’t make or find the huge pile of money to buy franchises.

So sorry Joesephus isn't will writing. This was an absolutely a great story, even if it did portray lawyers as ethical people

You forget that three children a older daughter, middle kid a son, and the baby girl. You lame red neck heck. You fucked this great story up. Kept it in Denver. Wgat load of 💩💩💩💩💩

RIP

Big John stay true to his cause and family,,,,,,Suzie-Q,,,,,couldn't live with the truth and chrysalliside to her inner psyche TK U MLJ LV NV

You won't read this, but I have to say that this is one of the most moving stories that I have read here on LW. I realize that both men and women are this selfish and entitled, but this wife was a total bitch. I have read this same story by others, but yours is the best by far. Wish we had more lawyers like Mark and Laura in our world. Good to see a good man find the life he desrves. Wish we had more writers like you in the world too. RIP

I rarely comment on comments, however, those who talk about legal I inaccuracies are wrong. In Texas the process he used is very real and effective. J spent a lot of time with a family law specialist and part of his purpose was to give a bit of publicity to what he considered a better approach to divorce.

i read the original and went WTF what an unconcionable deluded self centered bitch. And honestly i was kinda dismissive of him not cutting bait. doing what he did would be like shooting yourself in the chest EVERY day. And while i think loving your kids would make you do alot. there is a limit to everything. That said, this was really well done. And not to hammer it but i like where the lady attorney called out the feminists who dont want to be equal but want to be the one with their foot on a mans throat, not all of them are like that but most, and this is what you get(ive actually seen it in a friend of mines now ex wife.. she was even more deluded than susan .. and is in jail for 4 years because of her bullshit. kudos to the writer he knocked this one out of the park

What brilliant talent lost as such a young age. Please do yourself a favour and after you finish this story, read the authors biography. Jake Rivers I salute you for putting to words things that needed to be said in remembering this author. Dan

The author can dish out some serious dialogue. Total respect. Brilliant doesn't cover it. *****

Way better than original authors work.

So good your version washed theoriginals foul taste away. Thanks.

Than having an indoctrinated useful idiot make a political statement on a Literotica

Loving Wives fiction forum.

...Taking a break from Trump fans and their cheerleading of fascism (Seriously do any of you people watch anything that isn't Fucks News?), this was a 5 star story.

It wasn't the greatest, the most awsome like you would not believe or even the best ever. But it was well written and it was totally UNIQUE. It was unique because it turned the sociopathic, FemiNazi train wreck of NICI's story into something that actually made sense. It unravelled the weak justifcations and broken logic and exposed them for what they were, the selfish, innane ramblings of a willful, unrepentant slut wife. She is exposed as a very stable genuis.

It was unique because Joesephus gave us an asshole cheater that wasn't a cunning wife hunting serial predator, just a weak, pathetic man, a guy that wasn't using depression as a ploy just to gain her sympathy and spread her legs (this bitch just decided to make herself available to him), and an adulterer who manned up in the end, accepted his wrongdoing and regretted shitting on a good and decent man, even if Rich's idea of compensation seems a bit ill conceived. And lastly, Joesephus gave us a legal representative that had the moral decency to be outraged and disgusted with the evil, demented thinking of her client.

It deserves 5* for these things alone. It is a shame things like these so rarely occur in LW.

since this is taking on a liberal, conservative theme, let me ask a few questions. When Obama won, did the conservatives riot , and destroy private and public property , did they oppose free speech, were any of their marches uncivil, did they break window assault police, have Hollywood types dream about burning the white house? hmm! I don't remember but I think I remember liberals doing such things under the gist of free speech. Since when is burning, destroying property, and rioting free speech. That is just the tip of the ice berg of things you do, your politicians are even worse, they lie steal and conspire with evil sources to achieve their agenda. sure an glad I'm not one of you. I remember the old days, if we weren't happy with the out come , we waited for the next election, I gees we were more civilized back then. Finally read the bible once in a while and learn what GOD thinks of your liberal belief .

well done, legal accuracy aside( they seem to make it up case byy case anyway).

Started fine then you pulled some stupid legal shite out your ass, fantasy or not keep at least close to realistic.

is wondering if more women are batshit crazy delusional like Nici and just hide it better.

Not that it was long, there was just too much to it.

The author wrote:

"I hate it when I hear that asshole Rush talks about liberals not caring about results but only about intentions. I hate it when he says that liberals are more concerned about the reasons for an act someone does that what the act is."

Rush is absolutely 100% correct. To liberals intentions are everything. Results mean little except as a club to beat others who don't agree, over the head. They are more concerned about reasons for an act, hence the way libs lose interest in a act. A great example would be the Indians and all the Leftists who demonstrated with them against the Key pipeline. Did anyone see the garbage and damage they left behind in oil burning vehicles? It cost taxpayers millions to clean it up. Liberals had no interest in it.

Michael Savage said it best. "Liberalism is a mental disorder."

Truer words were never spoken.

Title says it all.

too bad more lawyers aren't like Mark instead of sharks in bloodied water

Thanks for ending a horrible tale as a "stand up guy".

Thanks for sharing on Lit.

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There's so many inaccuracies is this story, I gave up halfway thru the first page. A lawyer representing a lover in a divorce action would be clearly a conflict of interest if not grounds for disbarment. Though not the least of his financial obligations, If they did marry, the mentioned alimony would have ceased.

A tremendous ending to Nici's horrible tale. This author is sorely missed.

I was very happy to see Jonathon wind up on top. I really sympathized with the character of Jonathon. I was thankful that he finally found a love worthy of his loyalty.

I am coming to detest these 'Take over someone else's story' stories.

That said, this one could make me change my mind. It was not the all abut revenge or wimps. And I agree with the other comment about the lawyer's lecture to the wife. I did think that the 'other man' was a bit of an ass. He was a major cause of the grief and while he admitted being an ass and offered to help fix things financially, he simply blamed the wife where he should have apologized to her for misleading her as well.

I will have to read more of Joesephus' work

and used a good story and created an ending, TK U MLJ LV NV

For Nici's piece of crap. More satisfying and realistic than the other two. Josephus was a good writer I'm sorry I dismissed his stuff after reading one story I did not like.

A poignant ending to a horrific story about a self-centered woman. Although the collaborative process you portray sounds reasonable, more often than not when two people are divorcing emotions are running high and the desire to "win" the proceedings takes precedence over doing the right thing for all involved. A well written sequel. Keep after it.

the part where the guy she cheated with offered to pay her for school and such was to much. She is a whore just pay her for her services as one and let it go.

he slurped hot jizz, cornhole took a buggering, betrayed!

This was a truly heartwarming story where the good guy actually wins in the Divorce. At least as much as anyone can win. Shame there is no Laura to have such a frank conversation with some of their clients in real life. How many of us have wanted to tell some disillusioned someone how the cow ate the cabbage. It is a true shame that Josephus isn't still around to carry on with what would have been a great literature career.

jack

What I didn't like in Nici's original Tale was that she said she wanted to create a believable Character for the Wife. But what she did was to create a raving sociopath. In the same fashion your dialogue between Laura and Susan is Pearls before Sows because you cannot talk a sociopath out of being sociopathic. Is it believable that he was married to a sociopath for 15 years and never noticed anything ? I dont know, never did that or got the T-Shirt, but while I think Nici failed in her attempt to give the 'Loving Wifes' category a Woman you can identify with, I think you caught up the loose ends as well as possible.

. . . that you're no longer with us to continue to gift us with your incredible writing skills.

loved it.

What a style you have

This was right on point, Susan will never be happy because the man she is looking for doesn't exist. Hazy Gray and Underway......The flags at half mast for you. RIP

When God embraced Josephus into his heavenly kingdom, the world lost a truly talented writer.

Man you write from the heart. I just love your stories. I really wish you'd write more.

I cant seem to find any flaws from any of your stories.

Keep it up and thanks for these feel good stories.

Splendid conclusion to Nici's ending. Her's was pathetic..yours was great!

I have read all of the sequels I think, and no doubt this was the best... As far as Rush...the pill-popping hate monger is an ass-hole! I was raised in the forties,fifties and early sixties when most of America thought like him. Most of the good and caring people came to understand that his type of war-mongering, profit-taking, woman-hating, race-baiting..."thinking," is what caused all the grief in America since President Roosevelt! I love your writing and I am sorry for you that you agree with him on much of anything! It doesn't show in your writing thus far... Keep it up!

Well at last! Somebody who got it! Too bad the original author (nici) who started this story didn't have a bloody clue. Seriously. What kind of twit tries to defend a psycho? "shades of gray..." yada yada. Ridiculous. The grayest of the grays is BLACK. Moron.

The fem who wrote this piece that's so full of all the most horrid pop pyschobabble is . . short a bit in her pitiful tiny brain. Where'd u go to school anyway, the Oprah school of Dr. Phil?

The poor male character married first a totally self centered witch and the second ended up being a manipulative bitch. Y'll don't think so but read the story again and you'll see it - that's what all 'strong' fems do, even to those males like this male who is depicted as a wimpy wuss all the way through, he'd never know the 'strong fem' he married was manipulating him now would he?

So this writer, not 'author', that's too elevated to call her that - is most definitely NOT a strong fem, she IS a WANNABE.

it didn't have the emotional tension of Nici's story. There was a change in Susan's character by the author who tried to make her worst than she was.

Very well written continuation of the story. Very well analysis of the relationship of the couple through the mouth of Larua.

Well written and technically correct. Often stories with so much detail are filled with inaccuracies. This story didn't appear to have any. Thank you for a delightful read.

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For a very Gifted writer Joesephus was i congrat you and a very well put together ending from nici`s story that was much better where ever Joesephus is right now may his spirit rest in piece with all the great writers ahead of him.

Pat

Atlanta,Ga

Anonymous, take your medication and stop drooling. You know better than to jerk yourself off in public. It's unseemly. Shame on you for making people think that you're an idiot.

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We now return you to your regularly scheduled smut channel. Had Anonymous actually said anything important, you would've recognized that immediately.

The story was constructed very well and with lots of emotion. Some realistic, some not but that is what makes it a fictional story. Reading the comments, we found a similarity between Alvaron53's professional commentator comments & Rush's commentary - both are full of bullshit! It is amazing how idiots think alike! On a side note, it is interesting to see how Alvaron53's side-kick, "Phil" is so in-tune to the professional commentator. One could summarize, that their "toe-tapping" adventures at various airports could create such a "bond". All three of these idiots give new meaning to the defintion of "pathetic".

Well done Joesephus, very impressive! This powerful and deeply moving story explores the darkest sides of human relationships, but still has a brighter, happier edge to it. Beautifully written and a worthy sequel to the tale of Nici. Looking forward to reading more of your work. Pete.

I have to say you are getting better with each story! You have done a superb job of taking a very feeble story and making it credible in your ending. It is hard to ever think of a woman this stupid much less supposedly strong. It is a sad state that lets some think that what one person wants is what the world owes them. I think you did a very laborious and effective work on this story line.______________You are one of the very best young people to use this site to express your writing abilities. It is an honor to read your take on the categories you pick to expound on.---------- With the utmost of respect_____Thank you--------PT

How in the world Republicans got working people to vote for them is astonishing, that's like the chickens voting for Colonel Saunders. Joesephus thank you for fixing that drivel that Nici wrote. You have a lot of talent. With high regards. Luis

i sure hope that this complete the story that had been started by Nici.

great writing and the story is the best of the sequels. love the ending.

Eleven highly-rated "H" stories in a row, and it's easy to see why. Keep on writing, my man!

You added the missing elements from the previous stories - other adult interactions in this conflict between Jonathan and Susan. Susan in the previous stories operates in her own distorted reality where she can become a wife to two men and expect that kind of relationship should be acceptable to Jonathan. In your story she gets a reality check. While the outcomes are not that credible (her lover set up Susan in her own fuck shack so she can interview future husbands?) there is very clear adult feedback that what she was doing was wrong!___________________________

Thanks for the story!_______________S_L_E_E_P_L_E_S_S_I_M_D