All Comments on 'Whole'

That was extraordinary...

Hmm. I don't usually care for the "you" and "me" device, but you managed it well. I can't quite tell if the irritating stylistic quirks here are an extension of the narrators sloppy ideas about language or your own voice asserting itself, but I'll give you the benefit of the doubt. ^_^ A little self-serious, though I suppose it goes with the black eyeliner...an attitude I've always disliked (yes, the ellipses is a joke about sloppy style). And please, don't capitalize "goosebumps." // All that said, however, I did enjoy the story. I look forward to reading more of your work.

beautiful and heartrending. I liked the device of the glass too. Very powerful.

It hurt to read you submission, it was so honest and truthful.  It hurt because i could see elements of my own relationship in your tale; you have opened my eyes... i hope its not too late.

I cried hard after reading this. It was so raw and touching. The real emotions in it moved me so much. I'm crying as I write this comment. I hope you can resolve the problems in your relationship. I really do. You have so much love for him. I only wish I could find someone who loves me half as much as you love him. This is such a beautiful piece.

That was achingly lovely.

Absolutely gorgeous.

This was soo moving. At the end I was close to tears because it was easy to relate to. Keep on writing :)

im feeling a lot with this