All Comments on 'Whoops Ch. 02'

didnt i read this somewhere before?

But this chapter was just unworkable as far as I could see. There is something fundamentally unlike-able and wrong about a woman who would cheat her way into her daughter in law - the mother of her grandchildren's - pants. Betray her son?! Really? No, I couldn't give a shit if she was a saint in all other regards. This is a massive turn-off.

The story might have worked much better as an erotic, hard core adventure. It would have been hot actually! But instead, the story had emotions and betrayal and all that sort of heavy stuff, so it didn't work. Sorry.

Thanks for the good read, I enjoyed it very much