All Comments on 'Wife's Business Trip Ch. 01'
by rpc35
- 42 Comments
Anonymousover 11 years agoThanks for taking some time to donate your thoughts in this story. Enjoyed reading it. Slow and staedy build ups work better for me, the reader, than a quick and in my face story. Getting there is the fun.
Anonymousover 11 years agoDid I miss something? Except on business trips.
Anonymousover 11 years agoalways is how long 5 minutes?
first drink?
first cute guy?
first man/boy to talk to her?
how long is always?
please note the word husband appeared once
he never had a name and was not thought of again
only hope he is home bonking his 25 year old PA and drafting the divorce papers
Lickideesplitover 11 years agoI was sure this was a re-submission about two strangers assigned to the same cabin, until we got to the nekkid guy on the bed! It got really interesting at that point...the blindfold gave Sweetie safety in looking at him and later in divesting herself of her raiment. That made the eventual seduction plausible!
Badly in need of editing!
5*
nakdsubover 11 years agoThis is really pretty bad; both from a story standpoint, as well as a writing standpoint. Please, you can make much more use of personal pronouns. You don't have to use the person's name all the time. Such repetition makes for a boring read.
digdaddyrichover 11 years agoIt was used 37 times throughout the page.
As far as the storyline goes, I though it was hot that a married woman would seduce a young man and have her way with him.
I wonder if her husband still excites her sexually or is he too trite and the sex is boring with him.
Will she will continue finding men to satisfy her urge for sex? That will be interesting to find out.
Thanks for the read.
ythebadgerover 11 years agoIt was the the first word in the first 7 sentences - and a count shows you used it over 150 times in the story! That is not good writing!
The story itself was pretty dumb anyway - and totally unbelieveable.
wasagadaveover 11 years agoIt's a shame so many picked your story apart. I have read much worse on this site that didn't get slammed.
As far as " always been faithful" is concerned, I think that's okay. We assume the "until now" part, don't we?
There were a few problems with missed letters and composition, but again, I've seen worse. Just read and re-read before submitting, and/or run it past one of the editors.
A good fantasy that I imagine a lot of women, and men would enjoy.
Keep writing
Anonymousover 11 years agon for those who dont like this, too bad, u cant please em all.
n for those who hate cheating slutty wives, please dont read such stories. it only adds to your frustration.
keep em rolling. i like it
DWornockover 11 years agoHowever, I find it very unrealistic so I could only rate it 3***.
Anonymousover 11 years agothat the husband either will never find out what a cheating slut she is, or if he does, he will be fine with it. This could turn out to be a decent story, if the husband found out and acted like he had some balls, but I very much doubt that will happen.
Anonymousabout 10 years agoEven if the story had been good, you kind of ruined it by your poor writing skills.
In the 1st paragraph every sentence begins Katie........ & it's the same trend throughout the whole tale. Not a good way to endear this story to your readers - get a good editor
Anonymousalmost 10 years agoWhat is with hateful critics.. enjoy the story or close it and move on.. 5 stars.. I cannot wait to see a second part.. I hate cheaters, so I hope the husband was there, only to surprise, and he got the shock of all surprises... perhaps as she closed her door, she noticed her rings gone and a note saying, I came to surprise you.. and I found out a lot, don't come home, our marriage is over, I will just take our rings back... your now ex husband....
Anonymousover 6 years agoaway from home forever so she can avoid the embarrassment of going through a divorce
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoThis story is VERY VERY EROTIC & ROMANTIC LIKE THE MOST BEAUTIFUL MUSIC, 2-in-1!
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoAs a wife, Kate is a keeper!
When my wife was in her mid 30s she had a job that involved air travel with overnightstay. About 6 times a year she was away for 3 days and as many nights. I just knew she was not goody-goody while away on business. She had gained new self confidence & was getting better & better in bed.
She was a living proof that practice makes perfect!!!
We are still married.
Anonymousover 4 years agoI agree with anon 07/14/19 "THIS IS A FINE EROTIC STORY..."
His comment pertains to me too. So i will reapeat it.
His wife was away on business for 3 days and as many nights six about times a year. He knew she was not goody-goody gumdrops while away on business.
She was gaining new self-confidence & was getting better & better in bed.
She was a living proof that practice makes perfect!!!
They are are still married.
All of the above goes for my wife & me too.
Anonymousover 4 years agoFaithful and committed wives DO NOT CHEAT! That is an oxymoron! Words mater so one star at best!!!
Lickideesplitabout 4 years agoWandering eyes, not wondering.
When Jake gives a compliment, it is Jake’s compliment, not Jakes.
‘Hear’ cannot be used for ‘Here’ - nor vice versa!
Why not capitalize cabana, then start capitalizing it? Then start capping cantina?
People wear a swim SUIT, maybe in the cabana suite!
“Jake, you are naked!” can be shortened to ”you’re’ - but not ‘your’.
... and later it would be “”you’re married”
Point is, rpc# needs to use an editor ... but not just for poor understanding of English wordsmithing?
Why would an event logistic company (?) send someone to do nothing except drink wine and seduce
some more-mature married women in an outrageous way? And what resort is EVER going to put two
guests from different companies in the same rental unit ... let alone if they are of opposite gender?
Anonymousabout 3 years agoThe previous caller made some typos. The correct text is:
Both erotic and true to life.
Katie is a keeper.
Anonymousabout 3 years agoI totally agree with anon who posted their comment less than 2 years ago. Here is the quote of the comment:
"LOVE IT VERY VERY MUCH:
5+ (5.25/5=105% "Above expectations!"). THE STORYLINE WAS BRILLIANTLY CONCEIVED & MASTERFULLY CRAFTED.
This story is VERY VERY EROTIC & ROMANTIC LIKE THE MOST BEAUTIFUL MUSIC, 2-in-1!
Anonymousabout 3 years agoAs to married women, most of them have sex when away on business if the opportunity presents itself.
(I know my wife did.)
Anonymousover 2 years agoCheating does not automatically make a married woman a "whore". It's how she handles it afterwards. Giving affections outside of a marriage without sharing the information and accepting consequences afterwards is marriage-breaking disrespect to many. For example, a real open marriage acknowledged between spouses is acceptable if concensual. If not, and a wife wishes to continue marriage, then its about confession and demonstrating real remorse or it would mostly be all over. Many cheated-on spouses will stay with a marriage if that is done even amidst anger if they have minor children or longterm joint assets. But the spouse is due the respect of choice. Otherwise its a wash or should be. This story is well plotted and written so far. Will finish it out of curiosity and appreciation of nuance.
Anonymous2 months agoEXCERPT FROM THE STORY.
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Last year he started adding to my suitcase small items, nothing that I would get in trouble for if my suitcase were to open accidentally, just some sexier lingerie than I would normally travel for work with, but still stuff I didn't pack. He would ask me to wear crotchless panties to business dinners, knowing full well I was having dinner with men I worked with...
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I started doing the same for my wife the moment got the job which includes air travel with overnight stay.
At the time my wife said she would never wear the special presents.
I never stopped throwing lingerie in her suitcase.
Lo and belold one night a year later she snuggled up to me and said she had to ask me something important. She said of course.
"You have been tossing those sexy items into my luggage. I believe I know why you are doing that... You know deep down I am shy. You want me to feel comfortable if I ever undress in front of another man... Am I right or wrong? I LOVE YOU & MUST NOT LOSE YOU!"
She goes, "You nailed it! Yes, you are right..."
Then she added, "I promise I will tell you if I ever undress in front of anoter man. I love you too."
About 3 months later my wife called me. "My love I can not speak now but I want you to now that a man has seen me naked tonight... If you still love me, tell me so please."
"Well I will subject you to gentle erotic spanking."
Anonymous2 months agoI am copy pasting someone else's comment.
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Anonymous - almost 3 years ago
As to married women, most of them have sex when away on business if the opportunity presents itself.
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My wife is no exception to above rule. I know that for a fact, l gave her the "Hall Pass."
After she got the hall pass she was getting better and better in bed.
Anonymous2 months agoI am copy pasting this comment which I can relate to.
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Anonymous over 4 years ago
I LIKE THIS STORY VERY VERY MUCH. IT IS EROTIC. PERIOD.
❤
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