by julybear7
You write well, good flow and easy to follow. Your characters are alive (real) and interesting. There must be a chapter two. Loose ends and half told thoughts. Looking forward.
I think it could have used a slower pace, with a little more of them getting to know one another, but the plot and characterization were very good.
Needed better plot development. Without a good reason given for the whole break-in/attack drama, it made the story line seem forced and far-fetched.
I don't know how I missed this one for so long, but I found it and loved it; a bit like your characters and the ending. I wish...