by julybear7
I don't know how I missed this one for so long, but I found it and loved it; a bit like your characters and the ending. I wish...
Needed better plot development. Without a good reason given for the whole break-in/attack drama, it made the story line seem forced and far-fetched.
I think it could have used a slower pace, with a little more of them getting to know one another, but the plot and characterization were very good.
You write well, good flow and easy to follow. Your characters are alive (real) and interesting. There must be a chapter two. Loose ends and half told thoughts. Looking forward.