All Comments on 'Zachary & Ciara Ch. 03'

I've been following this story from the begining and I'm very excited to see how its progressing. Great work!

I've been waiting for on update on your writing. I wonder what's going on in Emily's head. Wow Colin isn't the biz and Zach is gonna kick a**, lol. Thanks and again, it was nice to see an update.

I am so glad that you are back and in full force I see....please don't let us wait to long again:-)

This could be a good story. Problem is that it is drawn out to the point of forgetting the beginning. Almost have to go back and re read the first two chapters to just get back on track.

Please either write longer chapters or closer together so that continuity can be achieved.

It is a good story. I'm just frustrated waiting between chapters. Have a short attention span...

I am glad you finally updated the story. I do believe this will be a great story once Ciara and Zach start getting close! I cant wait until the next update is posted!!

Finally!!

I've been checking back every other day for this story.

I love it,

I hope that Emilee secret stays with the family only.

I can't wait for Zach and Ciara to bond.

So happy to see this update it was so great looking forward to the next one please update again real soon thanks

I am so glad to see you continue thi story. Great job.

I like little Emilee but I am ashamed of Colin for coming there in the first place under false pretenses. If he wins this time will he be back for more drawings? As for Abigail she sounds like a whinny person. I am so happy that you are backed. Missed you here and on TST. Divisionred.

lots of stuff is gunna be happenin' i'm so gunna keep an eye out for this story, pls don't be too long.

Love this story, can't what until the next chapter hopefully it will be soon.

But, I would love a new chapter of S&M more....

I stumbled across this story literally by accident and read the 3 chapters straight, and I have to say I am now hooked! This is really good stuff! Hope you'll update soon!

Great story! You weave a wonderful tale. I can't wait to read the next chapter.

I wonder what collen was going to do when he when to their suite? Kidnap her or what?

Wonderful story can't wait for the next chapter

I really like the direction of this story and keep checking back for updates. It's very different from what I've read so far on Literotica. Looking forward to some heat between Zach & Ciara.

This story is reeking great. Bring on the chapters!!!

I can't wait to see everyones reaction when they find out about colins gambling problem.

Wow! Great update!

I agree with the last poster bring on the Heat!

Really enjoy reading your writtings, can't wait for more!

What happened? Keep it coming plz!

Love the story so far. I'm so ready for the next chapter. Hope it comes soon!

I'm really enjoying this story and looking forward to more. Please update sooner than later : )

Don't just leave us hanging like that! Please?!

hey i dont mind if u take longer to update........ but i'll wait around ..... please do update its a sweet story with amazing characters specially the li'l emilee........!! :D

dont leave the story half way......!!

i'll ckh back again after a feew weeks if we ha a update... :P

I hope to see more soon!!

its been 8 months n no word fromu u on this one.........!! i'd really like to see where this story goes.......... i'll be very glad if u continue........!! so far it has been an amazing story.........

Now that Emiliee had helped Colin win the horse race I am sure that he is going to want her to do it again. Thanks

Colin is a grown man, yet he sees nothing wrong with trying to exploit the Godly gift of this little innocent child. Nothing good can come of this for him I feel. Lovely how Zach seems to have feelings for Ciara and she's not aware of them??

Ok covered the bases with one old bitch, one young bitch and a male with issues about being good enough. Good plot thickening elements... now let's see how they

swirl and converge. We know Collin has got to go. The minute he held sistah's hand it was over and he was on the clock. Tick tock....tick tock.

Oh well, self worth issues make folks do stupid things as we shall see.

...nothing scintillating about it yet, but the exchanges between Ciara, Emilee and Zach are very good and the dialogue seems well thought-out.

Emilee is a very inquisitive young lady wish she could give me the correct numbers for the Mega Millions draw. The jackpot currently stands at $331 million