by russello
good concept , but a little too short , I'm wondering if a 2nd chapter could be possible , I know i couldn't write a part 2 . having said that 75% is not a bad score either
Good concept! Reading pleasure would be enhanced if we knew who these 2 people were before the rape! Tell us why it was so important and thrilling for this particular man to be able to rape this particular woman.
Didn't need any more detail as it was a short story, to the point, and set the atmosphere perfectly. Thanks for a good read!
It was short, but it had a lot of detail. It also has very few typos. Overall, it's a great story.
Loved the subject and the idea, well done. Sure wish such a program existed, would make family night so much more interesting!