All Comments on 'Chinese Doll'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 18 years ago
sequel?

Is this all, or is it part 1 of a series?

thewordsmith2590thewordsmith2590almost 18 years ago
Constructive Criticism

This story would be much better after a bit of editing. The verb tense keeps switching from present (is) to past (was), which is rather distracting. The ending rather left me hanging; will there be further installments? I look forward to them, if so.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 18 years ago
Can't Wait!

Until Sally's little Asian pussy gets the big dick she deserves.

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