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My Second Nightmare

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by Vulcan_in_Ohio10/18/07

Finally read this story; lots of comments!

This story seemed to drag along but I have the feeling that in real life, a lot of men behave the same way (as do many women). It is really difficult to accept that something is over and it's time to move on. When a loved one dies, there are a number of stages of grief including denial, anger, bargaining, etc. and Nick went through quite a bit of this process when his marriage died. Karate aside, he does seem to have trouble facing up to his problems. He does not need to be violent towards Alec to prove bravery (although it might make a story more intense and dramatic), but he does need to stand up more firmly for his principles. When his mother keeps hounding him about Jenny, it is illogical for him to keep threatening his mother with "no more contact" if she continues to discuss Jenny! It seems to me that, as difficult as it may be to cut off your own mother, there comes a time when one must do what one must do. He could simply have changed his phone number to an unlisted one. That would have ended a lot of unpleasant calls! He could have just filed for divorce instead of making the excuse, "Let her file for divorce if she wants to be with Alec." Procrastination doesn't save him any lawyer's fees; in fact, such fees probably go up faster than the inflation rate and pay the fees he will, eventually. He could have sought a restraining order against Jenny to keep her at a distance so-as to avoid being repeatedly subjected to emotional hurt. And finally, when Angie pulled her bullshit, he should have just called it quits with her, too. But Nick seems so very naive, it's as if he wants to remain vulnerable and a victim. I think this is partly why he appears rather wimpish, karate notwithstanding. It's how one faces up to one's problems, how one deals with reality, that determines if a person is a coward or not, and Nick exhibits avoidance behavior to the hilt.

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by be_cruel1310/24/07

Wow!!

This was an amazing story!! It was realistic, it was heart-flutteringly tender, and it was very well-written. I don't know why so many of the other commentators think that the main character is a pussy - I think that he had a lot of shit happen to him and he acted in a way that many of us probably would in similar circumstances. I'm happy that Angie turned out to be such a sweetie... :)

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by Anonymous01/30/08

Pulled a Jenny! Hehehe that's a good one.

Fantastic story!

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by Anonymous04/05/08

Good work:)

One thing. Breaking things with your hands has nothing to do with being a black belt, and fourth Dan is a very high grad which most often is as much honorary as about skills, and given to those that trained for decades, not months. Otherwise I'm happy to say that I truly enjoyed your piece here Ohio. I feel a little sorry for Jenny though, but only a little ::)) Cheers Yoron.

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by Anonymous04/25/08

Liked it

I really enjoyed this story, it was well written and the emotions were almost believable. I'm glad you chose to allow the husband to move on at the end. In too many of these stories the husband is written off as an insecure little wimp, but this one shows that even though devastated a man can move on and find hope again with someone other than a cheating slut.

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by exjock05/13/08

How could this story be topped?

Fabulous Story! What else is to be expected from this great author. This is one of the last of Ohio's stories for me to read. Recently, I discovered his work, and have been reading through all the stories. This being one of the longer ones, I postponed it until I had an evening to digest it. Now I can go to sleep with sweet dreams of our hero with Angie, and life goes on! The best revenge is a great life "after"........

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by Anonymous05/19/08

Great...except..

This was really one of your best, in fact, one of the best stories I have read. The except comes from the black belt issue. No one goes from brown belt to 4th Dan in any style in such a short period. I know it seems a silly point to get hung up on, but it is one of those nagging little things that distracts from an otherwise great story. Timeline is important in a story and when that gets disrupted especially by something that did not matter to the story, such as his belt rank, it is annoying. Otherwise I loved this story.

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by Anonymous07/09/08

This is one of the best stories ever written!

If only the current stories could try to compare to this. Thank you for your work.

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by Anonymous03/27/09

Four Dead

In Ohio

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by Anonymous05/19/09

Typical fine Ohio story

I always look forward to Ohio stories and this is typical great example of an interesting erotic story that catches the readers sentiment and keeps them on the edge of their seats. Would have been perfect if you had not made Nick such an immature wimp, but noone is perfect.It was still a great story. Thanks
60 year old George

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by eliocechet07/02/09

Gret story

Great, great great story. Thank you Ohio

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by BallsOfSteel08/27/09

'mothers' pffffhah!

What's with these so-called mothers who love and have faith in everybody except their own flesh and blood?

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by Anonymous01/17/10

And then?

This was an enjoyable story. I kept expecting something to happen to/with Davis. It would be nice to know what happened a year or so later in the lives of all parties involved, except mom.

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by bigguy32303/22/10

Is this guy the most pussy whipped wimp in the world, or what?

His MOTHER, his EX-Wife and his future wife all fuck him over. Is there any hope for this dope? I think not.

How hard is it to say "GET THE FUCK OUT BITCH" and mean it?

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by C_frommn07/13/10

A follow-up piece about Jenny's reaction to her Best Friend and Ex-Husband getting together. would be excellent just to show her pain and total defeat.

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by robinhod01/03/11

The best by the best.

I'm a bit of a newbie in these parts and I've read the comments back to 2006. I just hope that OHIO is still out there enjoying life and doing his bit because this story absolutely did it for me.

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by Happyman45601/27/11

Phenominal...

Yes, a phenomenon is a rare event, happening only once... This story is far beyond the degrading, cuckold stories and wife betrayal. He maintained his civility, took out his rage on a room, not a human being. I have been through betrayal and divorce--I know the feelings.
This is a well written story and one of the best I have read here. I agree, another chapter giving some us some paybacks enjoyment would be nice, but beyond this man's obvious character.
Yes, great story telling....

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by Anonymous01/30/11

Verygood,,,,very very good, a read well worth five stars,,, at least!! Keep on writing writer. R.T.

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by BILLYTHEGER02/07/11

revenge sleeping with her best mate who took piss out of him ,learn one thing when u split ,make clean break and have nothing to remind u of past

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by Tavadelphin03/31/11

Extremely rewardng and fun -

A lot of pain expressed and dealt with - some good coping tools used - a few bad ones too.

A well designed outcome - Angie was better than I gave her credit for at first - figured the make him screw you part was coming - glad she had more character and integrity -

Nice writing

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by Anonymous03/31/11

This is the 5th or 6th time I've read this...

Like a fine wine. Thanks. More stories soon?

tom anon

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by FD4505/13/11

All you need to do is learn how to properly capitalize your sentences

and string the proper number of sentences together for a dialouge and it would be nigh perfect.

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by Gualterio05/24/11

Very enjoyable

A lot of good stuff here. The pain of betrayal, some humorous dialogue, a couple of characters with character, fairly decent sex. Real nice!

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by DWornock07/12/11

Good grief! A DRAMA KING!

More than half the wives at some point will fuck another man. However, in case of the DRAMA KING, it is so much worse. Boo hoo hoo; woe is me, my heart is ripped to pieces. I am angry; I can never trust again, and I can't or sleep. No one in the wide world has suffered such horrible pain.

What crap. How can a wife fucking another man even come close to being as bad as watching your son or daughter die of cancer. But what happened to the DRAMA KING is so much worse.

Then there is also the improbable case of a movie star wanting her to live his. What nonsense, a movie star would just get into her pants; he certainly is not looking for a relationship.

Finally, she would never go to that much effort to get back with him. Since she is so beautiful, all she needs do is snap her fingers and a dozen men more attractive than her low ranking husband would come running.

Therefore, the best I could do is give this story a 2** ranking.

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by Anonymous07/12/11

I give it a 5.

Starfairy

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by RePhil08/02/11

Sweet!

Loved it again for the first time!!

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by tazz31708/30/11

2 OLD ADAGES

FROM THE FRYING PAN INTO THE FIRE=====WHO CALLED WHAT BLACK....TK U MLJ LV NV

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by YamiBoy09/06/11

^__^

I loved this one. I'm glad things worked out with Angie. Good riddance, Jenny! Great story.

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by huedogg10/08/11

Nice story

I was about to make a comment about DWocuck but I like the story so much I just move on. 5 STARS

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by Talonsreach10/12/11

We need to refocus comments on the author and their stories to their craft not their message

I thought that this story was well written. The characters were well conceived. The plot flowed. Ohio, you are definitely in the top tier of authors on this site and I hope to read your work for years to come. Thank you for your work and I hope you continue to share with us your stories and passions.

As for DWhorecuck and others like him, I don't care whether you like the moral values driving the stories you read. I don't care what your level of acceptance of literary license is for FICTION (yes, this is fiction we are reading folks). I don't care if you were dropped on your head as a baby and so are now mad at the whole world. I am tired of seeing GOOD writers being driven away. Please keep your comments to the mechanics of the story, the writing craft of the author. I'd like to see us encourage and help authors to get better at their craft. We need to refrain from beating up the authors and driving them away but instead we as readers need to help them better their writing styles and their wordcraft with CONSTRUCTIVE suggestions.

If we don't like the "message' of the piece I hope you will join me in voting by just clicking to the next story or next author and try to find one you enjoy more.

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by Scarecrow5110/12/11

Talonsreach

If a writer publishes a story he/she is doing it for public reaction or he/she is wasting his/her time publishing it. And if the public does not tell the author what they think then the author will not improve his stories. Do you think the Big Name authors do not take into acount what the reader wants? This is BS that a writer writes for his/her satisfaction. If that were true he/she would not need to publish there works. So that is why readers should let the author know what he likes or dislikes.

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by Anonymous01/05/12

This is how NORMAL people cheat and respond to betrayal

This is a powerful story that credibly portrays how a bored wife could be seduced into leaving her faithful husband for the promise of an exciting life. It also is a credible depiction of the pain that the spouse that is left behind feels.

This is in contrast with "Finding Normal" where the bored wife jumps into the bed of a loathsome person who tells her that he hates her nice boring husband and screws him over at work and while his mother is dying. "Finding Normal" is controversial because it is so nasty. It is not well written. Look at this story. It has complete conversations. The scenes are complete not just started and dropped. The reader cares about most of the characters. I wish Ohio was still cranking them out.

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by BTTap01/10/12

Ditto what Anon before me said

I haven't read all of Ohio's stories yet, and I finally got to this one. It is almost a perfect story in the cheating wife subgenre. Great writing, emotional, realistic, interesting characters, good pace. I especially liked the gallows humor Ohio throws in from time to time. Just top notch work.
I don't know, but I'm guessing that Ohio's stories (and this one in particular) are the inspiration for a lot of the better, more recently active writers on this site. This story particularly can be seen in some of popular author Stangstar06's better (and less wacky) stories, though even his best stories rarely rising to this level of excellence.

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by CountryCouple02/11/12

Davis needs a story !

Loved this one.. the character of Davis was also well thought of. To the point he could have his own stories... even maybe his take on the "Nightmare"..

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by count2three04/19/12

When do you write the Story where Angie betrays him ?

I mean WHAT THE FUCK?! After what he is through she pretends to be his friend to get under his radar, then gets him to fall in love with her, all the while knowing that its a scam and she will also break his heart after the did the dirty. AND THEN YOU FUCKING HAVE THE BALLS TO SELL US THIS SHIT AS HAPPY END ? HE SWITCHED THE ONE WHORE AGAINST THE OTHER!

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by Anonymous04/19/12

I'm just amazed

at commenters like Count2Three (he'll get there someday) who retells an entirely different story from the one the author wrote and then gives the author hell about it. In the story in Count2Three's head Angie "gets him to fall in love with her, all the while knowing that its a scam and she will also break his heart after she did the dirty." In the story I read, Angie never makes Jenny any promises, is emotionally confused all the way through, never has a clear plan, only listens to Jenny's scheme at all with the (admittedly dumb) idea that it might heal Nick's heart by helping him get back with Jenny, then falls in love with Nick right away so that all the emotion she expresses is real, not a scam, and finally refuses to go through with Jenny's scheme and tells him the truth at a point when it can't possibly be any advantage to her to do so. But I guess the idea of a nice girl who gets in over her head is too subtle - it's easier just to assume that all wimmins is hoes and bichiz.

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by Anonymous11/10/12

loved it

Cheaters should just shoot themselves. No one has an excuse for getting seduced and cheating and i do repeat no one. You allow it to happen you either are the guy and fuck another person or the women and spread your legs cheaters are just that. There is no real man or woman that will forgive a cheater cause there is no forgiveness ever.

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by Anonymous12/29/12

Mom?

I can't see the guy NOT being outraged that his mother took his wife's side- after he'd made his wishes clear. Family is important, but family is a two way street. He'd sever his relationship with mom. I liked the story, and think it's a change from a lot of the author's work.

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by Anonymous03/26/13

Whooo boy

It is now a certified fact. You're nuts!
b79b

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by cantbuymy05/25/13

the only problem that i have is that the actor got away without punishment of any kind.

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by OneShotOne06/23/13

What was wrong with this guy

That his mother would take the lying cheating wives side over his? Oh he's a guy and in Ms Ohio's world that's enough.

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by Anonymous08/04/13

Spolied by 2 things

The actor twat should have been kicked to death and he should have disowned his twat of a mother!

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by Anonymous08/05/13

still a great, great story

Just re-read this, and it's still terrific.

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by firemanlit08/09/13

Other authors have written words that expressed the feeling of being betrayed by a lover, but this phrase describes it best.

" At about ankle height there were several deep gashes in the walls, where I'd kicked hard with my shoes. And on one wall, written in huge letters in red lipstick, were the words "DIE CUNT BITCH".

Ohio has been there, done that and gotten the t-shirt!

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by Drbeamer333308/15/13

Loved it

Classic story.

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by IronDragon08/29/13

Alec had a severe beatdown coming to him. Unfortunately, he got away without said beatdown occurring. Oh well. The rest was good.


5 Stars.

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by sugna10/28/13

I agree with the Dragon

How is it that you can walk in on a naked man fucking your wife and not take advantage of his defenseless situation? If he is lying down, jump on him and pound the shit out of him! If he gets up kick him in the balls! If they try to press charges, let them, it is their word against yours. If you stick to the story about him panicking and attacking you first, they will call it a wash and either both parties will walk or both will be charged. Either way, who cares? A pound of flesh goes a long way to making things right!

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by WoodyKC11/10/13

Well written but,

Your main male character made your story not enjoyable. Even when it ended up right I still felt nothing good for such a weak man. If the next story has this kind of a weak male then I will have to write you off with the cuckold crowd. Will have to see.

Woody

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by Anonymous11/15/13

Good Read

Your male lead was kind of a whiny pussy (how Alec escaped without a life-changing beating is unexplainable) but your portrayal of his ex was probably the most spot-on description of a clueless, me-first female I've ever read. Manipulative, minimizing her deception, oblivious to the destruction she's caused...He ought to sell her to the Hell's Angels, maybe that will wake her up!

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by Anonymous01/08/14

Good but

Alec being a cokehead is neither justice or an excuse -- nor would beating his ass be a defense of Jenny, this part is missing, and it would have let Davis do something interesting too, if he helped.

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