by wtdgirl1
Your story has some possibilities. However, it is almost unreadable due to the vast multitude of grammatical errors. Therefore, I cannot rate it any higher than a D.
I appreciate your comments.
And if you want to help me you are more than welcome to do so.
I know I am not perfect at writing, but I do the best I can.
But it is much better than the first one I wrote, even i can see the changes.
Hopefully I can get better.
Grammatically, okay it wasn't brilliant, but that just gives it a more realistic feel; after all, it was written in the first person, and which of us speaks grammatically perfect English? You should try submitting stuff as a text with audio story - realism really works in them. I'll be checking out your other stories shortly, but in the meantime, I'm going to put this amongst my favorites list. Great work, wtdgirl1 - keep writing!!!
Thanks Samilong for your kind comments.
I totally agree with you, there are very few people that speak perfect English.
I wish I could write things correctly, but I guess I have always had the same thing where I write as I would speak it. And I know I don't (and will never) speak the Queen's English!
But it works for me and I guess that's all that should matter right?