by bluknight
"Blouse unbuttoned to the naval"? Must have been sea-thru!
Sorry, couldn't resist that, but other than that, a very nice effort. Please continue. We "critics" have nothing better to do, so you should ignore us. Remember, those who can, write, those who can't, criticize.
Not a bad story, but I think cum shold go inside: mouth, pussy, or ass. It's wasted outside the women's body. Just my opinion.