All Comments on 'Early Arrival'

Firstly, I really liked the way you wrote it, your writing voice. You really packed in information well without making it look like you did so.

Also, it was realistic...sure it would have been great if he had burst into the room and fucked her. How likely would that have really happened though? Its realistic, not just any old porno story.

I felt like I was there, all of the emotions were clearly written. Its good :)

-JG