by Silk_Sheets
fantasy the rest of the story is un-necessary. We know what is going to happen next--But I love it anyhow
He wrote this story. He got a puter. He typed. He started every sentence with he. He sucks.
And, he (the author) did not start every sentence with it. It was a good introduction to what just might be a very entertaining series. I'm anxious to see what sort of trouble Jack gets into...and, as he's only 19, he is certain to have a lot of trouble. Hell, at almost three times his age, if I could suddenly be invisible, I'd probably find more than my share of trouble, as well.
This isn't going to be a long drawn out story is it. You have a shot at a good one don't ware it out.
so far so good... wouldn't he have been able to see through his own eyelids though?