All Comments on 'Daybreak Ch. 01'

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Jedi_KhanJedi_Khanabout 15 years ago
Very interesting...

Hell of an intro to the new series. A bunch of confused half-demons and a woman who can transfer powers. Very interesting. Still, a little bit of editing is needed, but like I said, a very interesting start.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 15 years ago
Holy Crap!!

I actually screamed when I saw this new story :P I loved Andrae & Nadia's story & I cannot wait for the next chapter of this one. I love the Brethren HOT HOT HOT!!!! Great start

AnonymousAnonymousabout 15 years ago
Great start!!!

glad to see u back with the mighty awesome Brethren!!! Keep up the fantastic work.

PennLadyPennLadyabout 15 years ago
Glad to see more

Nice start for this one. I think it's a little confusing, though. With all of the brothers, it's hard to keep track. :) When you referred to the "red-haired one" and etc., I wasn't sure which was Jameson and which was Liam (if I missed a previous description in the story, my apologies). An editor would help, but it really just needs some tweaking, not major work.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 15 years ago
Love the beginning but....

Love the beginning of your stories just don't ermmm...let us down with its conclusion like a deflated hard-on gone cold.

spearman1spearman1about 15 years ago
NEXT!!!!

Ok! I'm ready for the next chapter!! This story is starting off great!

AnonymousAnonymousabout 15 years ago
spelling

It's "Adam" not "atom".

starry_nightstarry_nightabout 15 years ago
Great start!

I actually got excited when I saw Jameson's name at the beginning. Yay, the Brethren are back in action! And this mystery woman has a cool power. Can't wait to find out what's going to happen between her and Grey Eyes. :) I think the hair and eye color descriptions are helpful to know which brother is being mentioned. The fiery red-headed Liam cracks me up! Thanks for writing!

KillerRomanceKillerRomanceabout 15 years ago
YES!

Liam! He's mine, by the way. Ladies, back off! Waiting for more! <3 L.

_Adriana__Adriana_about 15 years ago
Thanks!

I really enjoyed reading about this brothers - even when I have to work a little harder to remember which one does what jeje.

ArrnaArrnaabout 14 years ago
Question...

Which one of the three series you have, is to be read first?

AlydenAlydenabout 14 years ago
What an interesting story

What the hell!? LOL this story strange but different kind of strange. It's good and interesting :)

AnonymousAnonymousabout 13 years ago
@ Arna..

it's pretty simple to figure out that the story with the oldest date is to be read first and so on and so forth. just helping..

great story by the way purefire:)

laideebdrydalaideebdrydaabout 13 years ago
hellooooooooo

i lucked up and found u as a fav of one of my favs and i'm glad i did love ur stories and u earned a spot on my fav list. Please keep the stories coming!!!!!!!!!

little_piggylittle_piggyabout 13 years ago
very intriguing start

can't wait to read more - I'm off to ch 2 :)

phalanx_888phalanx_888over 12 years ago

Haha, very interesting; loved the chaotic scene near the end. ^ ^

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 12 years ago
thank goodness!

lol *blush

nevermind.. i found the next set.. at 2 am.. but made myself go to bed :D.. you are pure evil! i'm exhausted, have two children to care for, and i still cannot put this laptop down!! ;) x

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