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Etched in Mythral Ch. 01

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by gaju12306/27/11

Well written but needs more length per chapter

Good start to the story. Not every chapter needs to have sex to be satisfying.

A good story is more than enough as long as it has a sprinkling of sex in it (and god-forbid, sometimes even when there isn't).

In terms of length though I am hoping this is a teaser chapter and the next chapters will be much longer in length though.

Keep up the good work and keep the next chapters coming.

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by Anonymous06/27/11

Potential

Good scene development and imagery, as well as good development of personality of the victim. This story has some potential and you are better then many as a starting writer.

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by wierdwolfatnight07/24/11

An excellent start

I agree with previous comments- I'll take an 80/20 Story/Sex split anytime, especially when the writing is so polished and original.
Don't get me wrong- I occasionally just want writhing limbs, wet pussies and plunging cocks and all, but there are plenty of places to get all of that.
This is good stuff- don't let the fact that not everyone rates it a 5 get to you: it certainly doesnt mean this isnt quaility work, and I hope to see more of the like!

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by TantricMantra08/07/12

mmm.. i like the start

excited about this one x i will be one of your 'regulars' hahaa x

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