Who times how long they kiss for? 7 minutes, really? so was the ex best friend 13 too? Aiden as a 15 year old in the first year of dating Jane, had sex with Alicia?
This one might need a little proofing:
"Aiden sat in his cat at 5:43." (just one example) Assuming you meant 'car' or that is one uncomfortable house-pet. Mistakes like that can be distracting.
I also wasn't sure why everything was so precisely timed and measured? Describing a woman's breasts with just a bra-size is not particularly romantic, sorry.
I love you too.
I love you two means I love both of you.
is it I love you two, meaning he loves the mother and child?
The story is a good first effort. Keep at it. Realize you made the nit pickers happy and it didn't take much.
Sorry. First effort. Was very tired and the ending was poor. In fact, most of the story was kind of poor. I'll try again for a better story when I'm not so tired..
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