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smogged over by time. TK U MLJ LV NV

was mentioned here-http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?p=40332378#post40332378

Beautiful work, congrats on the E! Wonderful read.

~ maria

I always enjoy the lyrical quality of your poems. The words are melodious and the enjambment always connects so well with what follows.

I was a bit confused by the sudden change of verb tense in l8. It did make me wonder. I wasn't sure if you were speaking to your love here and now or reminiscing about a lost love.

I was revising this poem as I wrote it and tried to submit a revision actually quite soon after my original submission (note to Literoticans--make your edits before submitting), but missed the window of changing it. My revised version reads: "At times // I can still see cherry trees across the street" which I think might address your concern.

Maybe not, of course. In any case, I really do appreciate your careful readings.

As I went through your poems, I gave this another look. Having once lived in Elliot Bay, I know where Lower Queen Anne is and enjoyed the area. Although the imagery belongs to you, thanks for the view.

those were the days of wine and roses and you. TK U MLJ LV NV