Very naughty and sexy!
This was pretty good, especially if it is a first effort. Your sentence structure could be improved but, all inn all, a nice, sexy read.
I think I stayed in that same hotel once. :)
A very good first effort. I look forward to more works from you.
Very nice narrative style. This story reads to the audience very smoothly and with a distinct voice. Very straightforward and enjoyable. A very welcome addition to Literotica! Good luck with all your writing; I look forward to reading more from you.
A nice, easy-flowing narrative style, with an informality that matches the tale being told. And quite a fun tale as well. Keep up the good work, Charlie.
Glad to have you aboard.
Enjoyed this very much. It was a very fun read. Both exciting and humorous.
Very good work! I really enjoyed it. I look forward to seeing more stories from you.
A most enjoyable read - thank you.
You write well and I felt I was in the room with you and your wife.
Liked it a lot, wished was longer.
Reminds me of a few times at the beach when the waves dropped my swim suit to my knees but all I got were laughs.
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