All Comments on 'I See'

Om .......Amen

Sounds like you see more clearly than most.

it's really powerful with a wonderful flow and interesting language. I'm not sure whether the structure you've chosen is helping or not. My sense is it would be better if it were either more shaped or if some of the individual lines didn't run over (though that, I guess, is a result of the submissions box margins). Either way it's excellent writing. :-)