All Comments on '2 Room Zoo'

is my personal favorite

Made me laugh

Thanks

the last line injected some humor, but, with the varying line lengths and with each line a complete phrase in itself, the rhyme felt forced. Couplets often emphasize this forced feel. I think the first line had an unneeded "you" at the end. I think if you used a bit more enjambment to de-emphasize the rhyme and played a bit more with the humor you showed in the last line this poem would be improved. Think about it and see if you agree...

jim : )

I have no idea where that came from.

Anyway, thanks jim for the ambitious feedback. But really, thiis one was just for giggles. :)

heck yeah, its great Liar, Im still smiling ;)

This is one of those perfect pieces

To stick in collections of sobriety;

After a handful of somber pieces

Inject a giggle instead.

I just loved the heck out of this little rendering. Completely hilarious and irreverant it was a joy to read. Funny!

How about some of Mrs. Adersson's other pets?

the parrot will remind. TK U MLJ LV NV