All Comments on '30 Minutes from Now'

and great concept for a poem. I have to admit that I didn't finish reading it, because of the length. So, I didn't cast any official vote. If I get time to read it in its entirety, I will.

This reads as if it were two different poems.

I preferred the first,

for it is a fairly novel topic worth developing,

but I would suggest that you eliminate most of the "Thirty minutes from now," lines.

The second part is fairly standard for Literotica.

I really enjoyed the theme of this piece and the ending left the poem with a very erotic after-taste...a little too much of the "thwk, cha-ck,", but I'm betting that this would sound awesome if read at a spoken word or open mic venue...All in all a very good poem.

The character in this poem is out to set a new endurance record. Quite long but an interesting read.