All Comments on 'A Fable'

As always, Tzara, what appears to be light isn't. So many of your poems start with what seems like a gentle ride with the engine humming until you listen closer.

While not much is said about your love partner, I thought of a May-December liaison because of the allusions concerning your age and somewhow the diminutive "pointy little tongue" doesn't suggest some ol' hag is getting it on with you. Then again, it could be my inner dirty ol' man coming to the forefront once more.

Thanks for your comment. I think this was more of a formal exercise than anything. butters put up a thread about words that would be bad in erotic poems, twelveoone posted one, and I took it from there.

So, problem solving. Not necessarily erotic, though. But not a complete failure, either.

Thanks for your thoughts.

though you may be

the better verser

you must admit

mine was worser

your ending was soooo bad, it makes wince and laugh at the same time

perfect ouch

5ed with glee