All Comments on 'A Mirrored Quest'

You've over done the 'one who's'

stanza 1 line 2 should be 'who'

last stanza line 1 is ungrammatical

1= How the hell is this fit the titile? 2= As the title said 'Piss Poor Grammer.... To Say The Least. 3= You know what that reminds me of? It reminds me of a spiled bitch. And you are saing that all girls are spiled little princess bitchs! That sounds dngrousely close to a goddamn sexist comment. And I could go on and on....