by InnerDarkness
It’s Ok to fail just as long as we learn from our mistakes. After all I’m not sure if this fits but, Rome wasn’t built in a day.
After a particularily harrowing time ~ Experiencing the joys of a new beginning.
It is like a rational discussion of pain and suffering
Or like a dissertation;
The words are there but they convey no feeling
And when reading's done the feeling is, "So what."
Liked the over all transition from one of doubt and dispair to hope of a new chance to live. Warm smiles nice.
This could be excellent but needs work.
Go back to the drawing board.
Where's your inspiration? You need to get some or a person to inspire you.
...only can come when one doesn't rise above and move on..or try again.
you could squeeze a great deal out of this and sharpen up what you're trying to say.
just a thought..but a nice read ty!
is rather ambiguous, but that makes this poem especially applicable to anyone's pain. You did a good job expresing yourself, but I think you could sharpen this a bit and make it better :)