by My Erotic Tale
You're going to hate me, but since I know you really don't, I'm going to offer suggestions. I'm going to poke at your words and make them cry--actually, only a couple of them.
paint brush streaked clouds
across a baby blue sky
(baby blue needs to either be blue or some other interesting descriptive word. Baby blue is pretty cliché, though all cliché words can work. I think in this case, I'd just go with blue sky or maybe "across a blue baby sky" which is weird but interesting.)
a g'light glimpse at the tower
(What is g'light?)
long sheer slender leg in swing
(If you want to stick with the long, sheer and slender description, then try something like: slender sheer leg, long in the swing. This breaks up a long string of adjectives.)
Other than that, there's a lot of good stuff here.