All Comments on 'Abyss'

sticky situation... an interesting read, thanks

This poem is a decent example of how judicious repetition can quickly morph into something a little overdone. It's still a solid and good work but I would seriously consider editing out all the line starting Or's in the bottom half of this piece. They turn the voice a little sing-songy instead of keeping the reader intent on the mood of the poem...

I meant to click 4 instead of 5 but it's ok, this is a good poem. Thanks for sharing your work.