All Comments on 'Alan's Mother Was A Whore- Ballad'

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Ashesh9Ashesh9about 11 years ago
Some Fu........g Ballad !!

What a story Erectus -----Sex'n Violence can be showcased in a Tarantino Movie ! Well Done !!

erectus123erectus123about 11 years agoAuthor
Those of you who want/prefer short pity poems, please don't shoot me!

I enjoy writing in this ballad/story mode, a unique American form (with British roots) as performed by Robert Service a hundred years ago and yet strikingly modern. The fact is, there was an "Alan" and he was a childhood friend and although there is some poetic license here, he did kill his mother under these exact circumstances. I used to tussle with him at fisticuffs etc. but I never made the mistake to criticize his dish washing skill.

As we grow up we are forced to leave many behind but I chose to remember some of that forgotten legion of lost souls so they may not be forgotten.....

HarryHillHarryHillabout 11 years ago
You need to paragraph your monoblocks of text.

Couldn't get these old eyes to follow the story line without losing my place. Cheers

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