by Eleanora Day
How perfect is that line??
each poem amazes me more and more...and each one throws me into a meditation that lasts for some minutes
on how rich and beautiful and languid these words flow, and what sweet whispered emotions they carry.
muy bueno
muchos gracias
I love the latina in youuuu. This poem has a lot of vida *grin* I missed the forms, structural breaks, and only a few points really flow. I think your iambic pentameter needs work too, but if I ignore the hypersonnet part, it's a good poem.
Ok, I'm going to be picky here, because it was form you chose to use. The iambic pentameter was dead on, but sometimes it was off a bit, and others it was inverted.
If it wasn't a hypersonnet, I would love this poem with it's bilingual flair is faboo.
and reads like the succulent love poem that it is meant to be. terrific series, Eleanora ;)
This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 37,500 poems.
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