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tasty poem, seattle! I love the amorphous structure and language-- works well for this poem.

However. I have read many of your works, just never commented. I know your style, your intent, or I like to think I do. This section-

your image evolves like a swirling oil screen

prismatic amoeba slide from my fingers,

flickered lights flash shadowed branches

from here, no

there!

how about--

your image evolves, a swirling sheen

prismatic amoeba slide from fingers,

flickered lights flash

shadowed branches from here, no!

there

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sheen implies oily, "my" is understood. Very nice work, and I love your imagination. Keep it up-

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Merry Christmas~

is an absolute jewel forged with great thought...love,,,it...