All Comments on 'An Afterglow Sonnet'

recommended read over on the Poetry Forum for this unusual piece

really enjoyed some of your phrasing here.

and was unable to realize. tk u mlj lv nv

This smart, imaginative, thought provoking. "...and an inner mom invites/ herself...." great lines.

a near sonnet nice form well done this line

(...The candy grin floats off into a room)

does not work well sonically

or trip from my clumsy lips

fix it willya?