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accept them as fond memories of days gone by. TK U MLJ LV NV

I liked this a lot. nuff said.

This, IMO, is outstanding, demure. I usually hold my breath when an enjambed line is preceded by a preposition or conjunction (indefinite articles are the worst. Who the hell pauses after "a" or "an" before the noun or pronoun? We don't talk like that.) The rhythm of your language makes all the enjambed lines work well.

Some might say this is a bit obtuse. I don't. The reader can do a lot with it. There's a personal interpretation for almost anyone here IMO. I'm going to show this to my wife who is dealing with her difficult 89 year old mother living next door. (Who said only poets read poetry?)

I'm not sure why "grey/days, youth." "grey/days of youth" sounds better to me. Same with "narrow" instead of "narrowing," but that may be just my ear that hears it that way.

"presence" works just as well for me as "present" because either way I'm wide awake at 2:00 am thinking about all this stuff before the "old train" tries to run again in the morning.

back, back, back. But

the old train - chugalug squeak squeak - ehh?