All Comments on 'Apple Wine'

its the thought not the imbibing thats worthy. TK U MLJ LV NV

scene you paint with your flowing descriptive words.

A clever way of explaining Autumn as it relates to a lover's farewell. Beautiful farm images abound.

Nice piece off a couple's moment;

The only thing that throws this off a bit is the last 8 lines;

There are 7 instances of sing/song/singing and it just seems a tad overdone.

I like this one too, but I think it would benefit from a little bit of "tweaking". A few words are unnecessary, such as, when you refer to the crickets singing..( no need really, for **their song**). Just my opinion of course, but as good as the other 2 were, this one seems as though it was slighted, and it need not be.

I have really enjoyed your work lately, keep up the good job :)

Images were nicely detailed in this work.. I felt an uncomfortable edge in the wording... not as smooth as I would have liked it but that only enhanced the ending of the poem

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Lots of cool images in this one.