All Comments on 'Appreciation'

Has alot of potential and you have

some great ideas in there, but it

could use some punctuation marks

to break it up a bit and allow the

reader to stop and take in what

they have just read.

But thats just my opinion.

Did enjoy it though,

Thanks.

~ J

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see no reason in this not too

I love to see people take chances rather than to stay comfortably within limits.

You have some good ideas in here but like twelveoone and Jennifer C, I question whether you have chosen the best style for this particular poem.

I have a whole thesis in my head about discarding punctuation but I'm going to stop before I become too boring.

I have to mark you high for putting yourself on the line though.

Incessant babbling or stream of consciousness;

In either case, punctuation is superfluous.

While the images were interesting, the running together did distract somewhat from the beauty of the poem.

Although the words are hard to assemble the first time around, I found myself wanting to read the poem several times over. Reading it is much like chasing after a creature slightly faster than me. Intriguing and unorthodox -- i really liked it. Keep it up.