All Comments on 'Beauty in the night'

and you have a lot to say--actually too much. Your lovely lines might be trimmed, keeping the best ones and deleting the weaker ones. It is just a bit toooooo long to hold the readers interest in this era where epic poetry fails and shorter verse stays.

Please give us more. On the other hand maybe you should develope it into a story if you haven't yet done so.

"Hairy balls hanging like jewels cupped in your tight underwear displayed like diamonds in a jewelers storefront" very nice image!!! makes the reader open her mouth