All Comments on 'Beyond Oceans'

The last strophe (i think it's called strophe) in the poem really seems to stick out in my mind. This poem possessess excellent and soothing imagery. Hopefully all of us will one day be truly swept away "Beyond Oceans." Well Done!

But after correcting a couple of typos in the first stanza, it may sound even more like "Literotica poetry":

Just inside horny bitches

there's a depth that's still waiting

where lovers long

to find themselves swimming.

it's hopeless.

you are learning and will learn the longer you stay here.

There's no pressure.

Write and learn and save some of your early work and compare it a month or a year from now

Keep writing you'll get better every day

: )

I love this, Fawnie. nice job!

an invitation like that. I'll bring my flippers and snorkel. :)

Very romantic. It made me smile and want to dip my toes in the water. Thanks.

More to life

Than playing on the beach;

It gets too humdrum

When there are still the depths to explore.

The force of this realistic poem makes you want to wade out until it sweeps you out into the current of understanding.

no matter where or when.....the why is always important. TK U MLJ LV NV