by rosieredcheeks54
Writing assonance, alliteration hard rhyme
Coupled with pleading urgency and a well written femininity,
Brutality and savagery quicken my submission and the remnants of my restraint will succumb; a hunger.
This is like sex for my mouth when spoken aloud, you rock
I agree with tod; very seductive. I thought your skillful use of punctuation set a good rhthym.
The line that begins "Your indulgence of.." I didn't think added anything, and it felt like it was there just to have a rhyme. In fact, I think this good poem would have been a better poem without it.
Nicely done. I enjoyed reading it and reciting it.
for that little piece of thought, and a sentiment I agree with.