All Comments on 'Big Bad Wolf'

by rosieredcheeks54

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todski28todski28about 10 years ago
strong

Writing assonance, alliteration hard rhyme

Coupled with pleading urgency and a well written femininity,

Brutality and savagery quicken my submission and the remnants of my restraint will succumb; a hunger.

This is like sex for my mouth when spoken aloud, you rock

greenmountaineergreenmountaineerabout 10 years ago

I agree with tod; very seductive. I thought your skillful use of punctuation set a good rhthym.

The line that begins "Your indulgence of.." I didn't think added anything, and it felt like it was there just to have a rhyme. In fact, I think this good poem would have been a better poem without it.

Nicely done. I enjoyed reading it and reciting it.

todski28todski28about 10 years ago
thank you GM

for that little piece of thought, and a sentiment I agree with.

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