by UnderYourSpell
expression about appreciating the now of love. When one can relate poetry to one's station in life--meaning lights in brilliance. This is a shining star.
Go UnderYourSpell! This blew me away and is getting a recommend. You are being very emotionally honest here.
I only found one bug. That 'and' in line 11. Drop it and see how much tighter it is.
and cherished it's emotional honesty. I would query the punctuation though--it felt like there should be a semi-colon after line 2 and then no full stop after line 7, to let the thoughts flow on. x
exudes honesty
it feels absolutely true to itself, is unapologetic and doesn't leave a reader feeling uncomfortable having read it. i think your write absolutely engages with the reader, and that's not always easy with this sort of material - so many shut the reader out, where this addresses them directly.